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    dots Submission Name: Friendlessdots

    Author: Meckes
    ASL Info:    21/M/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    5.63 - 140/125/45
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 675
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       Written partly about a girl and partly about my life in general... It's about my struggle with MD and my suicidal tendencies and then there are parts about my breakup with my girlfriend/best friend...

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    I'm just a...
    two week psychopathic
    mortal sinner
    Bleed me dry
    with your sharp-tongued
    sardonic razor
    Blank canvas
    In my solitude
    I wait for life
    renewed by you

    And I'm
    two faces of drama
    in a pale shell
    swing forever in Hell
    In my solitude
    I wait for life
    renewed by you

    We're just
    nothing, nothing
    Friendless forever

    And we're
    nothing, nothing
    lovers for never

    Pill bottle and love letter
    Mark my early grave
    Ashes to ashes
    to your beaten slave

    (Two week, too weak)

    (Two faces... one shell)

    Two faces of a sinner
    Redemption in your eyes

    nothing, nothing
    Friendless forever

    nothing, nothing
    Lovers for never

    Pill bottle, love letter
    In my solitude
    I wait for life
    renewed by you

    Submitted on 2005-12-15 15:02:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Man this is so strong... and wow... I don't know what to say... I really can't relate to this, besides the thoughts in my head.. But that is simply nothing compared to this.. Yes there are times I'm sure lots of us feels like this way... a way to act... but I'm sorry you had to go through this or struggle through this. It must have been really tough. I can't imagine.

    You did a good job with expressing your feelings out.. Good Work

    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by XxStephyxX04 | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds as if you've crossed paths with a near fatal relationship and the volatile aftermath of the breakup (near breakup?). I'm guessing the multitude of personal problems you relate in the description have opened up some canyon- size potholes in your path to happiness with your significant other. This was much more expressive than similar writes I've come across on this site; a sort of twisted desparation in the form of a suicide note/love letter combo. Nicely done. Take care. Bill.
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]

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