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    dots Submission Name: Will It Ever Be?dots

    Author: tinkerbellsas
    ASL Info:    22/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 67/66/32
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsWill It Ever Be?dots

    Every night I go to bed
    Thoughts of you in my head
    Wishing you were there
    Showing how much you care

    Will it ever be
    Together you and me
    You kiss me and walk away
    Why don't you ever stay

    Do you want me or is the answer no
    Please let your real feelings show
    Tell me, please tell me now
    What will your heart allow

    If the answer is yes
    I will do my very best
    To keep you happy every day
    And tell you all the things I wanna say

    If the answer is no
    I won't be ashamed to show
    My completely shattered heart
    That you tore apart

    Either way I'll be okay
    I'll get over you someday
    But for now just know, I'll love you forever
    And I'll forget you never

    Submitted on 2005-12-15 16:01:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Okay i could read what you were saying and i liked the poem. But honestly (don't worry about what's about to be said because i write about the same thing.) This topic is played out. Even though i still write these i'm tired of hearing about it...anyways it was good and the structure was right. I hope to read more.

    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this poem relly touchd i feel like im goin thru this right now cuz everytime i get close to this guy he seems to pull away n play little mind games n its not cool n this poem jus put alot of things that i was thinkin out in the open n i thank you for that.
    | Posted on 2005-12-15 00:00:00 | by scardnscared | [ Reply to This ]

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