My, I'm hoping this is not personally inspired, but it is watched every day in every avenue of life, all too common. Expressed quite well, and I do believe written flawlessly as far as I read, but I miss my own mistakes let alone others. Many thanks for you writing, and I'll promise to visit again!
it seems a little off...and doesn't really make sense. Maybe if you had more words in it?... there doesn't seem to be any rythm or syntax at all to it...so its just..there. But hey if it makes sense to you i guess thats all that counts.
This was a nice piece. I think the style you used created a sense of lost and confusion. You gave the reader very few details about the love gone wrong, but you did tell what the aftermath was like as if it was a memory flash of sorts. Everyone has their own style. You have a unique one. Welcome to Eliteskills. Take care.