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    dots Submission Name: THe Blood that Dividesdots
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    Author: poeticvisionary
    ASL Info:    18/m/OK
    Elite Ratio:    4.09 - 88/114/24
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Dark
    Total Views: 1035
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1276



    Description:
       Somthing that was stirring inside of me. I wanted somthing that was kinda dark and mysterious, but this is kinda creepy. It might end up being a song that my band will perform.


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    dotsTHe Blood that Dividesdots
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    Lust breeds betrayal, that evolves into hate
    This chastisement that is to come, never too late.
    Reminants of love litter this dark empty floor
    The development of memories, opaque evermore.

    Evil turns it head, and smiles its black tooth grin
    The ending that's to come, the result of your sin.
    You try and try to breath, but the air wont come
    Your body turns cold and your face turns numb.

    This blood that makes you real,
    Makes you everything I am.
    And this hate that draws you
    Is the blood that divides.
    Taking all your life,
    Spilling it out your ears,
    This blood that divides you,
    The reason for your fears.

    Now you are in the corner, hallucinations all you see,
    Your mind playing tricks, your end soon will be.
    You overdose on the hate that fills your reached soul,
    And you now you will die, victim of Evil's control.

    This blood that makes you kill,
    Is what pulses on your inside.
    And this fear that draws you in,
    Is the blood that devides.
    Taking all your life,
    And drinking your last drop.
    This blood that divides you,
    Makes your heart stop.




    Submitted on 2005-12-16 00:08:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      woa. i seriously cannot find one thing wrong with this. the flow is incredible and i don't know how you made it work with all the syllibles but you nailed it perfect. i love how you break it off so that it stops rhyming and made it work for the poem. i think its one of the best and most original poems i've read today and you blew all of mine put together off the freakin' map. keep it up. +fav bye, Maliki
    | Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by MalikiDragon | [ Reply to This ]


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