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    dots Submission Name: thoughts 1dots
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    Author: cannibal
    ASL Info:    18/f/MO usa
    Elite Ratio:    3.88 - 47/47/15
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Longing
    Total Views: 950
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    Bytes: 513



    Description:
       heh well i know it sucks. This is how i think, most of my journals are filled with thoughts like these. Well tell me what you think, and its not a poem, but tell me if it should be written(structured i guess) like one.


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    dotsthoughts 1dots
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    What do they see when they look at me. A beast with no mind, an idiot. Or do they see beauty and brains. A creative being. When I die will I become a muse. Oh goddess can you make me a muse so I can conger creativity in others. So I can give the power of thought and nudge them in the rite direction. Ah these thoughts are sweet. Let me keep them, let no other thoughts come to mind. But no I will soon look in the mirror and relies the ugly that is at the surface and feel the haunt of those terrible thoughts.




    Submitted on 2005-12-16 07:26:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      HA! SORRy, I just get a laugh at these "from the heart" writes because it gives me a sense of relief that these thoughts can be written down and shared such as this. Not just hidden or "danced around" like most writings I read here. This was not just candolescent writing over a tranquil moment of some self induced epiphoronic moment. This was just as you said in the description...your thoughts. Cool beans maynard! But I am gonna have to say that no matter how much a person thinks they are ugly...someone out there has no qualm with saying these four words to them, "I think you are beautiful." Ya know? Man...I am reading so many good writes tonight and I am glad I am ending my night with this piece. Thanks Cassandra!
    | Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this write
    This write is reaching out to the people who need to hear these very words from someone else to wake them up to the beauty in front of them
    So in Reality
    Thank Your Goddess
    For answering your prayers
    God Bless
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      conjure, not 'conger'
    realize, not 'relies'
    right, not 'rite'

    Maybe you are judging yourself to much. Maybe they don't see a beast or an idiot, maybe they see a real human being. No one is perfect, you should never feel like you are being judged unfairly. No one can become a muse, they have to already be a muse. There is one, true god. There is no 'goddess'. And the ending of the ugly being on the surface. Is it? Do you feel you are unattractive? Do you feel ugly? You should never feel that way about yourself. You should love your own flesh. For no person ever hated their own flesh and loved others. You need to love yourself before you can truly love others. Don't be so hard on yourself. Be happy, be cool, be confident, and be strong!
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by manwithnoname | [ Reply to This ]
      No, it doesn't suck; I think it's an interesting thought. Do the souls of creative people help the next generation of artists? Pretty cool.

    Peace,

    Joe

    PS - Think you meant 'conjure,' not 'conger'.
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by joeyalphabet | [ Reply to This ]


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