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Dope sick


Author: manicsmuse
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Dope sick



Can I reel in one moment where I am better than you?

Easy enough to pretend but fucking impossible to do.

You realize you are that much to me,

an unattainable high.

Last thing on my list to fail,

but getting high is all I know how to do.

The follow up to the filling up of

every last empty hole that I have dug,

is you.


But without this drug, I kick and scream,

it tears at each step that I can barely take.

Why do you last within me days after

I use you to appease me?

The desire, the itch that crawls all over every inch of my brain

makes me your bitch that I need to be.

But all I want is more.

You realize you are that much to me,

A high I can never reach.

It is you who is sick.

You drink it all up, all of me.

See, I am the needle,

I guess you need me as well

So we might as well both go to hell.




Submitted on 2005-12-16 07:41:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is really deep and Personal
You expressed your emotions quite well with this write
Take it from if you find it in your Heart
I have been down the same path before
I was at the door to Hell
But I realised that I was hurting the ones around me
Friends family and strangers too much
I saw the beauty in the world and woke up from that sheer nightmare
Try Meditation
That helped bring me out of it
God Bless
Your Friend
Ron
| Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  wow.. this seemed very personal.. so makes it hard for me to say anything.. um but you might wanna.. smooth it out a little as halston said but if not its still brilliant I to agree!

lots of little words that could maybe be eliminated

hapi holidaz
penny
| Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by pennymarie | [ Reply to This ]
  
this poem is moody and great.
it's full of everything that would keep me reading
"A high I can never reach."
brilliant

I think maybe this is a rough and has to smooth out a little, but if you chose not to it is still a fabulous piece of writing [i can't talk i never edit]

This was original and different may i add it to my favorites?
| Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by Halston | [ Reply to This ]


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