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    dots Submission Name: Swept Awaydots
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    Author: tmullins
    ASL Info:    37/F/Mo
    Elite Ratio:    4.5 - 127/149/41
    Words: 230
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    Description:
       This is for my husband, a reminder of our beginings. I have had several suggestions for a title, purple prowler, swept away, our courtship, whirlwind romance, purple people eater. I think I will list them all and let him pick when I give this to him, so if you think of something original that you would like to add to my list, just let me know! and yes it is all true, and I have yet to see another purple prowler, or meet another female pastor named Porche! glad I got it on video!!!


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    dotsSwept Awaydots
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    In my mind, I still see him
    as he walked through my door.
    A friend of a friend,
    wanted to meet and nothing more.

    I rolled my eyes at the thought of this,
    I'm engaged to another man.
    What good could come of this?
    ...Nothing can.

    That beautiful smile.
    The way he laughed.
    Those drop dead eyes.
    The hours passed.

    I didn't realize he was taking my heart
    so fully and quick.
    He exuded such confidence.
    He didn't miss a lick!

    A divorced truck driver,
    what a find!
    I must have been
    out of my mind!

    A man who liked the way I looked.
    I hadn't noticed him three doors down.
    I hadn't seen him with my friends.
    I was always looking at the ground.

    He must be crazy,
    he knows I'm taken.
    He does everything
    with such determination!

    He makes me laugh.
    He tells no lies.
    He doesn't hold back.
    He makes me cry.

    We packed a bag
    and headed to Vegas.
    Oh my God!
    Won't somebody save us?!

    In the Little White Wedding Chapel
    we sat in the drive way.
    In a rented purple prowler,
    repeating words the Pastor told us to say.

    Her name was Porche.
    This story is true.
    Three weeks from the day we met,
    we were wed in a way we could never forget!




    Submitted on 2005-12-16 10:04:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a whirlwind romance that actually worked. WOW,
    I like this very much and I am not one from romance writes. This has a humor to it that makes one want to chuckle.
    How often we find that the relatioship that we are in is blindsided by the real love connection from a friend. I don't know the sastistics on that but i am willing to bet they aren't so low.

    Nicley done here Traci

    I am looking through your poems to see if there are some I haven't read yet.

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    | Posted on 2006-01-08 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
      Hee hee! This is a most interesting story you have told in this poem! Put a smile on my face. It left me curious though, you said you were engaged to another...what did you do with him? Did you tell him before you went to Vegas? This is a very romantic poem and a nice recap of the beginning of your relationship. Sounds like he swept you off your feet! How exciting! A couple typos noted here...in the fifth stanza "hust" and in the seventh "wish" otherwise a darling and romantic write. Nice work and congrats on such a wonderful time in your life. Hope the magic lasts a lifetime! Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]


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