This poem rocked. i hope i am not mitakened but i thought of The Lord... if it is wrong hen please inform me...
"I live in your city
I dwell in your rooms
I open your mind
You breath in my fumes"
wow, i love all of the things you cane up with.
the topics are so vast...
"I am life
I am death
I am birth
Your final breath"
i love it when poetry ends with meaningfull things like death.
This is a very complicated poem. But when i got to the middle I thought i was beginnging to comprehend it. Let me take a stab at it lol. Are you talking about God and all that he can do? I think you were able to capture the reader in this one. You had a great flow to it. And it stuck through the whole poem. I loved it and it is def a favorite.
wow it sounds like ur God! haha maybe you should not start out with i am black i am white. it sounds recest or something, but i do like it alot! and yes i do like the move road trip as well! oxoxoxoxox Jackie
This flowed so well - like a river of wisdom. I like that you illustrate that "IT" is everything - Good, bad, indifferent. It was simply eloquent - if that makes sense. Sometimes we forget how simple "IT" really is. Love,Peace,Joy~Feel,Experience,BE@@@ tif
This is an exceptional wonderful write You really captured my mind with this one Brilliant! This was one of the most thought provoking poems I have ever read I will definately be looking foe more of your writes
Your style is unique in this poem you sound almost like a rapper. I hope that is not offensive. I like the lines "i teach your children, i lead the blind, i preach in your chruches, your life is all mine." It really catches your attention and grips you. this is a no nonsense poem that covers all aspects of life. Very good