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    dots Submission Name: "I"dots

    Author: Martin S. Allen
    ASL Info:    33 male
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 671/237/43
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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       This poem actually has a meaning, but you have to put some thought into it.

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    I am black
    I am white
    I am day
    I am night
    Open cuts, and mended wounds
    Afterlife, and empty tombs

    I live in your city
    I dwell in your rooms
    I open your mind
    You breath in my fumes

    I teach your children
    I lead the blind
    I preach in your churches
    Your life is all mine

    I am strong
    I am weak
    I am mighty
    I am meek
    Behind closed doors
    Under the sheets
    In front of a crowd
    Out in the streets

    I am life
    I am death
    I am birth
    Your final breath

    Submitted on 2005-12-16 12:28:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The first thing I thought was yeah this is about God, but after I read it again it has a different tone to me. I really like this..
    This makes me ponder.thanks for sharing

    | Posted on 2012-08-29 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem rocked. i hope i am not mitakened but i thought of The Lord... if it is wrong hen please inform me...
    "I live in your city
    I dwell in your rooms
    I open your mind
    You breath in my fumes"
    wow, i love all of the things you cane up with.
    the topics are so vast...

    "I am life
    I am death
    I am birth
    Your final breath"

    i love it when poetry ends with meaningfull things like death.

    Great write

    Everything has its end


    | Posted on 2008-09-23 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      This is about God, the only thought that came to mind when I read it. Once again great work and thank you for writing it and sharing it with us.

    | Posted on 2007-11-20 00:00:00 | by PrettyHeart | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the contradictions like black/white day/night...it keeps the subject of the poem vague and creats some quick changes of tone that make this a fun read. gj
    | Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by poyu | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting.. I like the rhyme scheme. I personally think it would go better as lyrics instead of poetry, but whatever you want to make it is fine.
    | Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by Two Meters Away | [ Reply to This ]
      Alright so my mind just about exploded lol. But the only thing I could think to say it was is God so If Im wrong tell me .

    much LOVE
    | Posted on 2006-07-15 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very complicated poem. But when i got to the middle I thought i was beginnging to comprehend it. Let me take a stab at it lol. Are you talking about God and all that he can do? I think you were able to capture the reader in this one. You had a great flow to it. And it stuck through the whole poem. I loved it and it is def a favorite.

    | Posted on 2005-12-30 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. It seems to have a very strong point, yet no point at all. The rhyming was great, and though it was unclear I think that was a goal.
    The Conqueror
    | Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
      wow it sounds like ur God! haha maybe you should not start out with i am black i am white. it sounds recest or something, but i do like it alot! and yes i do like the move road trip as well! oxoxoxoxox
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by superjew2327 | [ Reply to This ]
      This flowed so well - like a river of wisdom. I like that you illustrate that "IT" is everything - Good, bad, indifferent.
    It was simply eloquent - if that makes sense. Sometimes we forget how simple "IT" really is.
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an exceptional wonderful write
    You really captured my mind with this one
    This was one of the most thought provoking poems I have ever read
    I will definately be looking foe more of your writes

    This is a Favorite

    God Bless
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      Your style is unique in this poem you sound almost like a rapper. I hope that is not offensive. I like the lines "i teach your children, i lead the blind, i preach in your chruches, your life is all mine." It really catches your attention and grips you. this is a no nonsense poem that covers all aspects of life. Very good
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by Fraser | [ Reply to This ]

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