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"I"


Author: Martin S. Allen
ASL Info:    33 male
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Words: 102
Class/Type: Poetry /Society
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This poem actually has a meaning, but you have to put some thought into it.


"I"



I am black
I am white
I am day
I am night
Open cuts, and mended wounds
Afterlife, and empty tombs

I live in your city
I dwell in your rooms
I open your mind
You breath in my fumes

I teach your children
I lead the blind
I preach in your churches
Your life is all mine

I am strong
I am weak
I am mighty
I am meek
Behind closed doors
Under the sheets
In front of a crowd
Out in the streets

I am life
I am death
I am birth
Your final breath




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  The first thing I thought was yeah this is about God, but after I read it again it has a different tone to me. I really like this..
This makes me ponder.thanks for sharing

Jen
| Posted on 2012-08-29 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
  This poem rocked. i hope i am not mitakened but i thought of The Lord... if it is wrong hen please inform me...
"I live in your city
I dwell in your rooms
I open your mind
You breath in my fumes"
wow, i love all of the things you cane up with.
the topics are so vast...

"I am life
I am death
I am birth
Your final breath"

i love it when poetry ends with meaningfull things like death.

Great write

Everything has its end

Fana

| Posted on 2008-09-23 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
  This is about God, the only thought that came to mind when I read it. Once again great work and thank you for writing it and sharing it with us.

~~Donna~~
| Posted on 2007-11-20 00:00:00 | by PrettyHeart | [ Reply to This ]
  i like the contradictions like black/white day/night...it keeps the subject of the poem vague and creats some quick changes of tone that make this a fun read. gj
| Posted on 2007-09-11 00:00:00 | by poyu | [ Reply to This ]
  Interesting.. I like the rhyme scheme. I personally think it would go better as lyrics instead of poetry, but whatever you want to make it is fine.
| Posted on 2006-11-19 00:00:00 | by Two Meters Away | [ Reply to This ]
  Alright so my mind just about exploded lol. But the only thing I could think to say it was is God so If Im wrong tell me .

much LOVE
James
| Posted on 2006-07-15 00:00:00 | by James Reyna | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a very complicated poem. But when i got to the middle I thought i was beginnging to comprehend it. Let me take a stab at it lol. Are you talking about God and all that he can do? I think you were able to capture the reader in this one. You had a great flow to it. And it stuck through the whole poem. I loved it and it is def a favorite.

Mikki
| Posted on 2005-12-30 00:00:00 | by MiKkI25 | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this. It seems to have a very strong point, yet no point at all. The rhyming was great, and though it was unclear I think that was a goal.
The Conqueror
| Posted on 2005-12-26 00:00:00 | by The Conqueror | [ Reply to This ]
  wow it sounds like ur God! haha maybe you should not start out with i am black i am white. it sounds recest or something, but i do like it alot! and yes i do like the move road trip as well! oxoxoxoxox
Jackie
| Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by superjew2327 | [ Reply to This ]
  This flowed so well - like a river of wisdom. I like that you illustrate that "IT" is everything - Good, bad, indifferent.
It was simply eloquent - if that makes sense. Sometimes we forget how simple "IT" really is.
Love,Peace,Joy~Feel,Experience,BE@@@
tif
| Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
  This is an exceptional wonderful write
You really captured my mind with this one
Brilliant!
This was one of the most thought provoking poems I have ever read
I will definately be looking foe more of your writes


This is a Favorite

God Bless
Ron
| Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  Your style is unique in this poem you sound almost like a rapper. I hope that is not offensive. I like the lines "i teach your children, i lead the blind, i preach in your chruches, your life is all mine." It really catches your attention and grips you. this is a no nonsense poem that covers all aspects of life. Very good
| Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by Fraser | [ Reply to This ]


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