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    dots Submission Name: My Souldots
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    Author: tinkerbellsas
    ASL Info:    22/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 67/66/32
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Bytes: 596



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       this turned out good even though it sounds a little sad now


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    dotsMy Souldots
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    Everyone changes all the time
    But a hearts true love never dies
    The things I did, the things I said
    I was oh so wrong
    I know it's been awhile
    But the wounds can't have healed
    Did you feel anything when you saw me again
    Was there any love left
    Tell me you haven't changed your mind
    I believe destiny is real
    And that you are mine
    It's hard for you to believe me I know
    But if you could see my heart breaking
    See the tears I cry
    I know you'd understand
    You own my soul




    Submitted on 2005-12-16 18:14:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      for one thing it's not just someone i like...I'm in love with them and i waited and I got them so ..I'm not obsessive or desperate..I made a mistake and broke hi heart and never thought he would forgive me but he di so that is what it is
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by tinkerbellsas | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel that you're alittle desperate, wanting an answer from someone you like...

    But I don't think its really worth waiting. Yea like what Red_reaper said, you should get a move on. I can't see the whole picture, but I've got a rough idea so yea.

    Its kinda sad having a keeper to your soul, but how was life like without being owned? Lol I think I'm not making any sense here... Maybe if you would like to improve it, make it longer.
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by RyukiTZR | [ Reply to This ]
      I don't see sad. I see obsessvive. You should move on, and return to them, perhaps not wanting anymore, or all the more worthy of wanting.
    THe last line, you own my soul, it reminds me of the devil-thing. Selling yourself to the devil.
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by Red_reaper | [ Reply to This ]
      i like it, there's some part of it I am kind of dissapointed in, I'm kind of lost in the meaning,
    it's like about someone breaking up, then, trying to get the other person to realize they are sorry, and...they love them.
    it's in a weird formation, but i think i understand it.
    | Posted on 2005-12-16 00:00:00 | by rAbit | [ Reply to This ]


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