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    dots Submission Name: Stayed Fordots
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    Author: tinkerbellsas
    ASL Info:    22/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 67/66/32
    Words: 192
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 540
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1182



    Description:
       this is about the same person as the l;ast one so also turned out well


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    dotsStayed Fordots
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    The love that I gave
    The love I thought I found
    It was never real
    'Cause it wasn't with you

    They say you learn from your mistakes
    Oh God have I learned
    You were the best I've ever had
    The one I should have stayed for

    You could have made my life complete
    Made me who I wanted to be
    Life's not easy without you
    Will you come back to me

    I'll wait as long as it takes
    Give you all the time you need
    Just tell me someday you'll be here
    I'll never hurt you again because ...

    They say you learn from your mistakes
    Oh God have I learned
    You were the best I've ever had
    The one I should have stayed for

    And when you and I are together
    We'll both be oh so happy
    We were meant to be forever
    I won't screw up again because ...

    They say you learn from your mistakes
    Oh God have I learned
    You were the best I've ever had
    The one I should have stayed for

    The one I'll always stay for




    Submitted on 2005-12-16 18:22:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      We all make mistakes in life - the problem is that we need people to forgice us sometimes. This was very compelling and tinged with much sadness and longing. A very good write.
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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