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    dots Submission Name: Trapped in My Minddots
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    Author: Faye Florentine
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 1/5/4
    Words: 483
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
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    Description:
       I'm trying to make a CD and I need some feed back on the first drafts of my lyrics. This one is about breaking free of the bonds that hold you down (sometimes people) and truly coming out of yourself and showing the world who you are. I wrote it so that people might be able to relate to it. It's called "Trapped in My Mind" and I hope you all like it! However, criticism (ESPECIALLY harsh criticism) is very helpful. Please keep in mind that this will be put to music, so ignore the "oh-oh-oh!"s and find a major tune in your head and apply a rhythm to the words. Thanks much!
    - Faye Florentine


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    dotsTrapped in My Minddots
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    I sit alone
    In my bedroom
    Starin' at the wall because I don't want to leave
    There's no where to roam
    I can't throw a tantrum
    I find it hard that I can hardly believe

    That you care
    When you said that you're not aware
    Of my emotions and my devotions
    To my heart!

    I wanna bust out, break out, sing out
    Loud! I wanna sing a song
    And I bet that ev'rybody here will
    Want . . . to sing along
    Becuase no one is perfect
    Because no one is the same
    So if I wanna make it
    I know I can't remain

    Trapped in my mind
    (Trapped in my mind . . .) Trapped in my mind
    (Trapped in my mind . . . oh-oh-oh-oh!)

    I'm calling out and
    Spreading my message
    Speaking my own mind for once in my life
    I'm not falling out and
    I've got a new edge
    For relieving all of my remaining strife

    I want you to care
    Don't say you're not aware
    Of my emotion and my devotions
    To my heart!

    I wanna bust out, break out, sing out
    Loud! I wanna sing a song
    And I bet that ev'rybody here will
    Want . . . to sing along
    Becuase no one is perfect
    Because no one is the same
    So if I wanna make it
    I know I can't remain

    Trapped in my mind . . .

    I wanna burst out, break out, sing out . . .
    (I wanna sing out, sing out loud!)
    I wanna bust out, scream out, ring out . . .
    (My message to the crowd!)
    Ju-ust be your-self!

    I'm thinkin' hope but
    You're thinkin' despair
    A kinder outlook can really change the result
    We're climbing the slope but
    You're head's above the air
    Because you don't wanna be part of the freedom cult

    And I don't care
    When you say that you're not aware
    Of all our emotions and devotions
    We're coming together, do you get the notion?
    (To join in!)

    I wanna bust out, break out, sing out
    Loud! I wanna sing a song
    And I bet that ev'rybody here will
    Want . . . to sing along
    Becuase no one is perfect
    Because no one is the same
    So if I wanna make it
    I know I can't remain
    Trapped in my mind!

    I wanna bust out, break out, sing out
    Loud! I wanna sing a song
    And I bet that ev'rybody here will
    Want . . . to sing along
    Becuase no one is perfect
    Because no one is the same
    So if I wanna make it
    I know I can't remain

    Trapped in my mind!

    (Trapped-in-my-mind)
    Can I find a way out?
    (Leave-my-old-life-be-hind)
    I just wanna get out of being -
    TRAPPED IN MY MI-I-I-I-I-I-I-I-IND!

    Trapped in my mind!




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