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    dots Submission Name: my own stan(d)dots

    Author: jbb360
    ASL Info:    22.m.wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 25/36/12
    Words: 208
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       this is a poem i wrote to my self about an overview of some of my older and newer poetry. so if some of it is incongruent with what you see on the site thats why. and if you really wanna read some of my more abstract stuff lemme know. if not ill let it rp. anyways enjoy.

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    dotsmy own stan(d)dots

    i read your poems
    i think they're really good
    but i think as an author
    your slightly misunderstood
    i dont know what it is
    i cant quite place my finger
    some arnt so memorable
    but some tend to linger
    i really like the ones
    about the girl and they guy
    its to bad for you it went sour
    the relationship didnt survive
    some that i read though
    make no sense at all
    i suppose in the end
    thats what youd call
    abstract imagry
    the escape of the mind
    but you should stay focused
    and youll be doin just fine
    some of the new ones though man
    are really sad and depressed
    though i still love to read em
    a man and his misery left me very impressed
    but still maybe you
    should take some time to explain
    where all these poems come from
    why they're in your brain
    i think people become alienated
    when they dont understand
    the words that your writing
    and how they are planned
    why they are penned
    the way that they are
    and what is the purpose
    behind the bizarre
    but anyways i just wrote this
    to say ill keep reading
    it seems like your writing
    may be the reason your breating

    Submitted on 2005-12-17 02:57:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ella said it beautifully! The whole idea of writing to me, is so that you understand it and that it means something to you. There will always be at least one other person out there that understands right where you're coming from and what it is that you're saying. My writing was more of an opportunity for healing, as most people's writing seems to be, but I'm starting to see at as being more of an escape for me. That's really what I started to use it for. I think that your work is very good and it means something to you and that fact shows. You're not just writing for everybody else. Keep that up!

    | Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by dreamweaver | [ Reply to This ]
      A reflection upon past and present work... nicely done! It takes a true poet to reflect upon their work to evolve as a person and a writer.

    You have done something very original here by looking inward to your own crative process and questioning the content of previous poems, but also opening up your imagination for work to come

    My favorite lines were by far
    "some that i read though
    make no sense at all
    i suppose in the end
    thats what youd call
    abstract imagry
    the escape of the mind
    but you should stay focused
    and youll be doin just fine"

    I often write very self absorbed imagery that only I can understand... Yes I am very guilty of this! It often leaves the reader feeling disattached from your work, but at the same time it makes your pieces VERY personal and full of raw emotion. I guess I see a lot of myself in your work. I look forward to reading more of your poems

    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by stormyskye | [ Reply to This ]

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