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    dots Submission Name: The Scarlet Curtaindots
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    Author: Faye Florentine
    Elite Ratio:    1.6 - 1/5/4
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       This has to be one of the corniest pieces of poetry I have ever written, and it's a limerick, but what the heck, the more I look it over the more ingenius I find the rhyming scheme. And the only reason it is so corny is because it is NOT general whatsoever. This actually pertained SPECIFICALLY to my life ONLY a half-year ago. (I will point out the dorky parts in parentheses.) Please tell me your first impressions on this because, well, I want to see what others think of it when they FIRST read it.
    Thanks much!
    - Faye Florentine


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    dotsThe Scarlet Curtaindots
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    I am hidden behind a scarlet curtain.
    When is it lifted; I am uncertain.
    My feelings can't show it
    But you truly must know it;
    For you, my heart is hurtin'!

    I am hidden behind a scarlet veil.
    Only it can tell the tale
    Of a young little miss
    Who yearned for a kiss
    From a migrant, shy, young male.
    (Pertained to my situation [migrant])

    I am hidden behind a scarlet cover,
    Hoping that you won't fall for another.
    The miss, 'twas me!
    And also, you see,
    You are the male and my good friend's brother.
    (Oh joy this wonderful rhyme is actually true! [My good friend's brother])

    I am peering out of my scarlet curtain,
    What awaits me is truly uncertain.

    (This poem is no longer relevant to me, mainly because of the word "migrant," if you get what I was trying to say.)




    Submitted on 2005-12-17 03:01:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this kinda sounds unfinished, is that what you intended? i like that the woman is shy and i guess, couldn't get the courage to speak to the migrant. Interesting poem
    | Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by Fraser | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
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