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    dots Submission Name: 17bars verse2dots

    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 669
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       this is the secound verse to 17bars.....I hope u like it ...I do

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    dots17bars verse2dots

    these 17 bars, the wickedest rhymes
    they right on time, they blow your mind
    and hit your spine/
    when you see, the aberrant king you want'em hittin it from behind
    these wanna be kings they talk shit, I know they love me
    but then they go and bite my rhyme, so they can be above me
    but when I choose to leave the throne, and visit your house
    you come home from work at burgerking to me fuckin your spouse
    now I'm sure theres plenty shit going through your head
    like maybe thoughts of suicide, or wishin I was dead
    your wifes a hoe, don't gotta take it from me
    just ask the mail man, and mr.G across the street
    ok now fuck this, on the serious rhyme
    I'm just sitting here writing I could be wasting my time
    should I be working on my education
    is what's really more important is a graduation?
    I don't know, fuck this time and place, and I'm'a go lay down cause my heart is racin

    Submitted on 2005-12-17 03:14:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great man, now i just gotta add me to it. Ha Ha. 17, 17. And everyone wanna know what it mean. Ha Ha. Git it.

    Robbin Hood

    God First, Get Money, And Don't Stop
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by Robbing Hood | [ Reply to This ]
      this was pretty superficial, but i liked it regardless. ur getting much better. keep it up. u know, [censored] dude's wives is a big no-no. i'm telling ur mom mr.
    | Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      lol nice. I like i like. It was funny. Is there anything else to say about it? no? then i guess you should enjoy this comment.

    | Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by Poeticprincess | [ Reply to This ]
      I feel it, Be more moving though, get deeper, leave the silence, scream what you feel. It could be way better. Keep working.
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by RymingQueen | [ Reply to This ]

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