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    dots Submission Name: List of Girls I've Fuckeddots

    Author: eliwhitneyradio
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 49/51/13
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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       I would never usually write a description this long, but there has been a lot of confused feedback on this. If you haven't already read the work, read it now, and come back to this description afterwards.

    ....OK, The only gimmick I was going for here is that for the entire poem until the last word the reader is supposed to think I'm talking about the list, but at the last word I slip in poetry. It's just an attempt to be playful. I think it's somewhat clever and funny. As for the person that said this is a disgrace to poetry, I completely disagree.

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    dotsList of Girls I've Fuckeddots

    the first mistake
    was writing it.

    letting people read it
    wasn't any better.

    they all encourage me
    to keep going.

    it's impossible to stop
    with humans acting
    as my hormones.

    now I'm wishing
    that I never
    even fingered

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      this was a funny title i guess your list got lost in the words or you did it to get noticed either way it turned out
    thanx for your comment on hunger goosebumps capitalized has nothing to do with the silly childrens books it is all part of the story

    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Honestly... I too have been known to 'disgrace' poetry! haha you might find A Lesson In Sexuality' entertaining and I am also currently working on another peice!

    Good job, clever, witty, enjoyable, and SHORT!

    which I love.

    haha. so the fourth suggestion for commenting suggests I talk about how this poem makes me feel.

    Well... good.
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Redstarr | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this! It actually made me laugh! I really enjoy your work, you have a very original style and kinda push the boundaries - which is always cool in my eyes! Great stuff! Cheers, sugar x
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by Sugar | [ Reply to This ]
      I get it... but I don't think I want to. I think this is a disgrace to poetry. Not you. Just this "poem." Whatever. Not pleasant, or even interesting, to read.

    | Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by Jester_Gesture | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem totally confuses me, i dont get it. what are you trying to say? i think its supposed to be funny but i dont see the humor.
    | Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by tss120 | [ Reply to This ]
      damn, for some odd reason i do like this poem. the name caught me for some reason, i don't know why, but after reading it brings a good thought to mind.
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by withblindedeyez | [ Reply to This ]
      oy. Jeniffer tricked me into reading this. i don't get it. i don't know why i read past the despriction

    hey! you said a bad word! i'm telling!

    please. spare us all. oh.
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by Avril54 | [ Reply to This ]
      I kind of get it I guess poetry is the girl and the more people read them and like them the more you write([censored]). I am not quite sure why you chose to call it [censored] that is a little young for my taste, but I kind of dig the sexual gestures.
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by The Black Rose | [ Reply to This ]
      this is funny!but its confusing! i dont getti it! but its funny! but i dont get it! wow! so y do i think its funny!
    ~akaila evonne~
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by iluvpoetry_1 | [ Reply to This ]
      LMFAO! well i'm not sure if you ment it to be like this but there's a [censored] load of symbology here that i could pick clean with a bone of a toothe pick. otherwise if i dont use that side of me, i'd say huh?
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by Trystam | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah this one confused me. maybe u should word it differently. i dunno i just didn't get it. *scratches head*. it seemed like u were going somewhere, but this write just feels incomplete

    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      i don't knw if the title works for this.. i see where u are going with this, and its creative with a lot of potential. just tweak it a bit.. i forget who wrote it, but on my list of favorites, there is a poem called sex with a stranger. read it and let me know if that was what you were going for.
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]
      is this about regrete in general , a poem , or a list. im sorry im a bit confused. plus i was hopeing to see my name on it lol jk. well altho i didint under stand it it was written nicely. k bye

    that girl
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]

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