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    dots Submission Name: greydots
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    Author: sweet sorenity
    ASL Info:    24/f/ Ga
    Elite Ratio:    3.11 - 211/221/58
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    i have words to say
    yet when i try to speak nothing comes out
    i dreadthe day
    all i can do is shout
    my emotions are repressed
    this is the cause to all my stress
    it is this that forces me to choke
    and drives me to smoke

    i hate the cause but love the feeling
    its my life this "god" is steeling
    no one to blame but me
    life is the ride and death is the fee

    i speak yet no one listens
    my eyes nolonger glisten
    it is a horible sight
    they burn in the night




    Submitted on 2005-12-17 10:20:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I loved the whole second stanza the most of all of the poem, it just stands out the most. The first stanza really gains all of the interest, this was written well, I wanted to keep reading.

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    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by vanhokinshtyl | [ Reply to This ]
      i love the last stanza, this is almost like some life stories i know aswell. great format and discription. although there's just sometimes no way to get out untill someone carries you from that hole your in.

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    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by Trystam | [ Reply to This ]
      hate the cause but love the feeling
    its my life this "god" is steeling
    no one to blame but me
    life is the ride and death is the fee

    these were my favorite lines. very good metaphor. i liked this write. i could feel the pain in the poem. is the smoke why u called this poem "grey"
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]


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