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    Author: RymingQueen
    Elite Ratio:    2.19 - 9/14/7
    Words: 38
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 223
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       thsi one is bad i think cuz yeah im in a hurry and thats bad o write i just wanted to update feelings,


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    She scream to me,
    "is this what you want"
    her voice slowly faded over the horizon. her fate was gone...
    deeply in love
    her heart shall of been broken
    and resting in peace
    is what she is hoping.




    Submitted on 2005-12-17 12:59:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    i have to agree with big J. although it is very deep, it has many gramatical errors. the flow could use some work otherwise it was a good try.
    | Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]
      i am confused, i have absolutely no idea what you were trying to say in this poem, it needs some kind of structure, but it did hold a lot of emotion
    | Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by Big J | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem is sad but I like that it carries a strong me3ssage with so few words. Short but
    certainly deep. I look forward to reading more of your work
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by Rapheal | [ Reply to This ]



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