This is such a sweet love poem. I am such a sucker for love poems so my opinion could be biased but I thought this was lovely. How wonderful to be able to feel this way about someone. And not just love them but to want to protect them and even sacrifice your life for them is really something. Perhaps you could call this one "Sacrifice" or, "Anything for you". I think those two suggestions are very well suited for this poem. This is a very sweet and warm poem and you have done a great job expressing your feelings for her. Wonderful. Take care.
Hey Mtt, I hope this is the works you where telling me about,first off there is one typo,I think its in line six It think you meant emotion not emoticon but then I could be wrong , as for the poem itself goes, I thought it showed a lot of intensity what you are feeling and of course thats good,,I got stubbed there on line 10 &11 had to read it twice more to fulling get what was being said, (Her lips seal all those secrets, that never shall she tell) I thought it just should of simply of said her lips seal secrets, that never shall she tell, but then again thats just my point of view kid, as for a title I thought maybe Eternal Flame would do nicely, and by the way it is a very will worth while piece , take care keep tapping those keys adnil
This certainly gives me the message that you are extremely in love with this girl. :) I think that your first line should be your last line tho...it seems such a harsh way to start a love poem, talking about taking a bullet for someone you love. It would make a strong statement at the end however. In fact , I would suggest that you start the piece with the lines that begin : " a face of radiance..."then add the original first 2 sets of 4 lines each at the end of the piece and see how that comes together. Just a thought...and I am a girl , so if this is to please a girl , then maybe that validates my comments a bit. :) As for a title, how about "Her Eyes" or "For Her". Damn...I wish I had a guy writing poems about me ! :)