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    dots Submission Name: young and naivedots
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    Author: shorti
    ASL Info:    17/f/uk
    Elite Ratio:    1.3 - 3/2/1
    Words: 157
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 552
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    Description:
       No matter how hard life seems to be at the time its only you who can turn things around. Just listen to the most important people in your life and remember they are only tring to help because they care.


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    dotsyoung and naivedots
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    I was only 15,
    young and so naive,
    why did you take advadtage,
    you took everything from me.
    You told me that you loved me,
    that you would be there til the end,
    but after all you put me through,
    I wish Id listened to my friends.
    They told me you were trouble,
    bad news and you were wrong,
    I turned my back on all of them,
    but they were so right all along.
    I gave you all I had,
    my heart, my body and soul,
    after all the things you put me through,
    in my heart you've left a hole.
    So I hope your happy now,
    for all you've said and done,
    now I'm trying to enjoy my life
    and I'm gradually moving on.
    But there will always be a thought of you,
    stuck inside of me,
    to show myself I'm stronger
    and how much happier life can be.




    Submitted on 2005-12-17 14:57:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      that was a great write and i agree that everyone must move one. we all live in the past a lil to much but the past is what makes us stronger today.
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by tomboy | [ Reply to This ]
      we all most move on and learn from our mistakes. life is too short to revel in the past. we can move on but we never forget, you conveyed that well.

    suberb write, great ending!
    | Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by Sweethonesty | [ Reply to This ]


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