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Daddy's Girl

Author: Sweethonesty
ASL Info:    17, F, OH
Elite Ratio:    3.29 - 40 /40 /14
Words: 135
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Dedicated to all the fathers still holding have to let her go. wipe your tears and watch her fly....

Daddy's Girl

She was his world
the apple of his eye
daddy's precious little girl
only one who could make him cry

In her eyes he was God
heaven resided in his arms
the whole world was hers
daddy's little charm

It wasn't too long ago
she was sitting on his knee
he promised her, "if you believe
you can be anything you want to be

'Honey, use your imagination
don't forget for one minute
your dreams are within your reach
and the sky is not the limit"

His little girl, all grown up now
no longer a baby
no need for his protection
she's now a young lady

He watches her spread her wings
a tear slips from his eye
he must let her go
but how can he say goodbye?

Submitted on 2005-12-17 22:13:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i'm adding to my favourites! which little girl doesn't know what its like to be the apple of daddy's eye?

i like this a lot. little girls really do have a special bond with their fathers and you've got it in words
| Posted on 2006-01-05 00:00:00 | by hayl | [ Reply to This ]
  wow that was just awesome ! :) You're a great writer . I like that part when it says He watches her spread her wings
a tear slips from his eye
he must let her go
but how can he say goodbye?

I like you're work .
Good -bye ! Brianna
| Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by IndependentGirl | [ Reply to This ]
  Beautiful! Being I am a Daddy's girl,,I fine this write with all the words I'd long to say to my Dad..I'm sure your Dad will love to get a copy or be read this poem by you Wonderful to be able to have that special bond...
| Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by AlabamaFarmGirl | [ Reply to This ]
  You have touched on every dads bane. We raise our daughter from birth and we try to protect them from all harm. It is hard but we give it our best shot. This is great and I can almost feel the tears starting to swell.
I hope you show this to you dad. I know for a fact that he would love it.
I have 3 daughter and two of them have latched onto me for dear life. Now they are in collage and My heart breaks when I walk through the door and find the house empty.

Please read my writes about letting go. There are a number of them. My daughters have written poems here to answer mine.

Their names on here are idlewriter and fiery_eyes.

I will add this to my fav wall.

Respect and Admiration

Clyde(A father letting go)
| Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by Wisdom Seeker | [ Reply to This ]
  it was amazing, i loved the language you used through out the poem, It was easy to feel the emotions behind the words
The only actual problems are the gramar issues aforementioned
| Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by Big J | [ Reply to This ]
  amazing. I love the flow and the rhymes but i found one mistake in it (not with the poem but the grammar)
"The apple of his eye"
"DADDY precious girl"
I dont like when people put inconrrect grammar to make their poem sound good.
Good Job
| Posted on 2005-12-17 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]

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