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    dots Submission Name: C.T.P.O.M.T.L.Y.O.dots
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    Author: withblindedeyez
    ASL Info:    19/m/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 83/121/58
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 819
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    Description:
       love sucks it brings nothing more than pain i hate it but i know what was gonna happen in the end, so its my own fault.


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    dotsC.T.P.O.M.T.L.Y.O.dots
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    Cutting The Piece of Me That Loves You Out

    Was it me, or was it you
    A lie spilled out from behind your teeth
    To meet, my fears and throw us away
    One cut for the pain, one cut to forget
    Your name….

    With this knife….
    I cut you out of my life
    With this knife….
    I cut you out of my memories
    Another day, another scar
    The pain sets in, has it dies today
    That piece of you fades away

    The world froze, when it happen
    All this time wasted, the truth
    Surfaced, from all these lies
    One cut for the pain, one cut to forget
    Your name….

    With this knife….
    I cut you out of my life
    With this knife….
    I cut you out of my memories
    Another day, another scar
    The pain sets in, has it dies today
    That piece of you fades away

    I got a knife in one hand
    And a scar on the other arm
    You put two and two together
    You’ll never be in my heart again
    Goodbye.




    Submitted on 2005-12-17 22:13:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Love hurts. Cutting may be your answer, but it's not gonna help anything later on. I'm not trying to preach, I'm just trying to get over cutting myself, and it's really hard to stop. Cutting just drives everyone away from you, though I guess that's what you're going for in this case...

    The poem itself is really well written, I like the repetitiveness of it, though others may critisize for the same thing. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2006-01-01 00:00:00 | by Azure | [ Reply to This ]


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