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    dots Submission Name: Just Reach Out Your Armdots
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    Author: Metal Heart74
    Elite Ratio:    5.12 - 72/61/17
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       My love, one and only has been hurt. I am going through a torment right now. i am helpless, nauseos, scared, tormented, and just I don't know what to do. If love overcomes distance why am I so far from helping her, and bringing her to peace.


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    Running along the winding dirt path
    laughing together, never looking back
    Love so true, passion so strong
    If it wasn't seen by one's eyes
    They'd never know it was true
    Sitting together, love and memories
    Watching the streaks brighten the sky
    Fear and amazement, seen through their eyes
    A rumble from afar
    a hellfire now
    The innocent was was hurt
    He coudn't say how
    She was lost and is such pain
    the earth beneath them divided
    he was stolen away
    Watching from so far away
    he stands helpless now
    She has the power, she has the means
    she forgets that he loves her
    he says what he means
    It is up to her now, she must reach out her arm
    His hand is a beacon, that will lead her from harm
    She'll be saved from the hell
    that she has been thrown into
    It's all up to her
    Just reach out your arm.




    Submitted on 2005-12-17 23:21:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a lovely and very sad poem. Your words are so heartfelt and touching and this situation seems very distressing. I am not sure what happened here or why it caused a sort of separation in your relationship, but your sincerity is quite clear and you have done a wonderful job expressing your emotions in this poem. It is very well written and expressed. And I love the title and how you tied it in to the ending of your poem. Just reaching out is really a wonderful way to rekindle the closeness lost and the way you have said that it needs to come from her is very sad, but you have understanding that she must resolve within herself and make the first move. This is a very moving poem. Nice job. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is the most sweetest poem that has ever been written.It is sad that sometimes when we want to help people out the most especially the ones that we love only they can help themselves.I liked how you explained the relationship in the beggining like how innocent it was .You don,t hear the word innocence in many love relationships.I also liked the way you used the hell fire as braking you two apart.It makes it seem that this thing that is overcoming her is trying to brainwash or manipulate her against you.Good write.Its going on the fav.
    | Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by shombray | [ Reply to This ]


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