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    dots Submission Name: random thoughtsdots

    Author: sword stalker
    ASL Info:    18/female/home
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 27/27/16
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Dark
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       like the title says, random thoughts

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    dotsrandom thoughtsdots

    Have you ever felt like you lost everything you’ve owned?

    That there’s nothing in this world to possibly believe in?

    that dreams, they’re lies.

    But that shadows and hate are the pregnant mates over everything right, everything good.

    Have you ever felt like burying yourself into yourself?

    Have you ever asked yourself, why we truly cry, why we look at the sky?

    why these haunting memories sting us?

    In the raw filth of this world, there is nothing to hold dear, only soft shadows and the whispers of night.

    There is nothing to believe in,

    there was nothing in the first place to believe in.

    Submitted on 2005-12-18 02:34:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      In the raw filth of this world, there is nothing to hold dear, only soft shadows and the whispers of night.

    I loved this line. I agree though that this piece isnt all that random - Perhaps it might benefit from a different title? I think then it might carry a bit more weight. An enjoyable read though - thank you for sharing!
    | Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by Sugar | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice ending but it feels like everything before it doesn't fit at all. I guess I'm just disappointed because I expected the random thoughts to actually be "random" and not interconnected.
    | Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by The Imbroglio | [ Reply to This ]

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