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    dots Submission Name: Senselessdots
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    Author: ax2x3m
    ASL Info:    21/m/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    2.53 - 24/24/14
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 767
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 815



    Description:
       I tried here to capture the feeling of losing touch with a friend and meeting him again finding that he's completely different ,insensitive and cold. i tried to convey it in a way that the person can no longer do anything but wish it to himself as he no longer has the authority to advice his friend as he's been out of touch for so long

    tried to depict the friend as more of a plant or a thing and not specifically a he or she to open the door for the friend being the person himself or to be open for anything that you could compare the friend to


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    this friend, it feel so damn unused
    when i touched it refused and froze my hand
    it seems, it grew a head without me
    bit me and abruptly pointed me his finger

    but inside, i know that you are just as warm as me, so tonight

    sense is what ill use to feed my friend
    i want him to breathe again, i want him to feel again

    this friend, it just feels so damn misused
    when i touched it, it accused of me of abandon
    it seems, it grew alone without me
    built a shell and then abruptly locked me out

    but inside, i know that you are just as warm as me so tonight

    sense is what ill use to feed my friend
    i want him to breathe again, i feel again

    i want you to feel again, breathe again




    Submitted on 2005-12-18 06:20:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know you're trying to convey the feeling of losing touch with a friend and finding him again but I found it extremely hard to understand this poem... I read it twice and I'm still confused.

    forgive me, maybe its just me.
    | Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by Sweethonesty | [ Reply to This ]


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