You've written in a style reminiscent of a 17th-19th century poet, full of the familiar personification and archaisms typical of the British (and later American) Romantic period. Despite the visual rhyme in the third stanza, 'shining' and 'rings' have more of an alliterative feel than true rhyme. That being said, this was a well composed work for an insomniac. Nicely done. Wish you the best. Bill.
i really liked this, it made me think back to the days in which my mother would sing lullaby's to me, this is great. its so original and i like the word flow. it just seemed to come together so easily. good job and nice write, though i think if you would change the third stanza a little bit, i know of one lullaby that has the last 2 lines in it, but i think it would be better if you edited that part out. but its your poem, i just think it might be a little better if you did. later, good poem