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sex with you is like

Author: Poeticprincess
ASL Info:    18/f/Germany
Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 333 /325 /104
Words: 121
Class/Type: Poetry /Passion
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ummm just tell me what you think

sex with you is like

sex with you is like
bodies togther
our bodies togther
mind blowing
our bodies, you and me
you thrusting in and out of me
your hands through my hair
touching my body
you looking into my eyes
no blood between us
as you...your body
on my body..moans..
saying things...sounds like
don't stop, damnit it don't
your name, you have me speaking
speaking in french, spanish,
Japanese, Chinese, Damn
you inside of me, got
words can't describe,
you and me, what you do to me
foaster, till we reach that place
where we are one
us togther, one last breath

Submitted on 2005-12-18 13:14:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is pretty good. I liked it. Yeah, what does that one line mean? "No blood between us"...It doesn't make sense to me, so could you tell me what you meant? Thanks. Anyway, this was good and everything was great except for that one sentence. Keep it up.
| Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
  yeah i agree with everyone else. it's all good except for that line. u spell like a 2-yr-old though. but knowing u, ur ass doesn't care. when did u become such a language expert? u learned four languages in less than a day. damn maybe u can teach me
| Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
  I like everything about this, exept for one thing...the thing about no blood between us...what does that mean, is it referring to physical blood. or blood as in family...or something else
| Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
  yea i have to agree it is pretty intense.. i don't really like that line "no blood between us" eother.. sounds kinda.. umm.. i don't know, nasty... but hey i liked it anyways..keep it up
| Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by soul full | [ Reply to This ]
  wow, pretty intense.. the only line I would change is
no blood between us .. it doesn't really seem to fit.
other than that, this is good.
| Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]

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