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    dots Submission Name: I'm Sorrydots
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    Author: JKPS613
    ASL Info:    17 / f / GA / USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 388/377/47
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 802
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    Description:
       9/11


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    dotsI'm Sorrydots
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    I’m sorry…
    Just spread your wings and jump.
    Fall to your one, one and only death
    But try not to think of it
    That way. Think of it as flying.
    Is it suicide if you’re going to die anyway?
    You’re victims but you’re
    So much more right now.
    A hero to this world
    But hero is an imperfect word.

    I’m sorry…
    Now you’re burning
    And the whole world’s crashing down.
    You’re falling free style
    To a God that you thought
    Would never let you down.
    It’s sweet though…
    She was the last thing on your mind.
    He was the last one that you spoke to
    And you cried together slow.

    I’m sorry…
    Your heart’s security was rough.
    The evil slipped right past it
    And now you’re trying to act tough.
    It’s burning or falling
    And the choice must be made:
    Why wait to burn in flames?
    Why jump when you could have stayed?
    The choice to die is up to you
    And either way we will remember you.




    Submitted on 2004-01-16 21:17:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      What an original way to convey the horror of that day. This beautiful , raw and sincere and conveying deep emotion and compassion ever so much more than a lot of 9/11 poetry does. Very good, Silver
    | Posted on 2004-02-03 00:00:00 | by Silverdog | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem moved me to tears... it's really well written, and it's a refreshing change from a lot of other poems about 9/11. A favourite.
    | Posted on 2004-01-21 00:00:00 | by Spirited | [ Reply to This ]
      It tugs the chords. Your ending is the poem's force.
    | Posted on 2004-01-17 00:00:00 | by hopefloats | [ Reply to This ]
      i very much liked it. but i don't think i would have known it was about 9/11 if you hadn't said so.
    | Posted on 2004-01-16 00:00:00 | by anarchyrainsupreme | [ Reply to This ]



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