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night b4 x-mas with a twist


Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111
Words: 150
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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night b4 x-mas with a twist



it's the week before christmas
and all through the stores
not a clerck was happy
or the guards at the doors.
The sale prices were hung, at each store with some care.
in hopes that soon mastercard will be there.
i wish we can stay all snug in my bed,
While x-rated actions explode in my head.
The gifts that I want can't be bought in a store.
come and keep me warm, with a key, close the door.
The moon on my breast, a key you bestow.
before your attention went to places below.
while Dasher, and Dancer, Prancer and Vixen
Comet and Cupid, Donner and Blitzen
where carrying gifts that santa might bring
i'll stay warm inmy bed, and thses words I will sing.
i love and adore you, until we death do us apart
this christams and the rest, i shall give you my heart.




Submitted on 2005-12-18 13:18:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I agree, comical, bouncy, sensitive but with an undercurrent of sensuality and erotiscism running through it. Very effective Mimi - and very good.

Frank.
| Posted on 2006-02-01 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  That was great. The mood had a sudden change that I loved. The style of the write was just unique enough to be noticable, but not too unique to bee strange. Love it, write more.
-Brian
| Posted on 2006-01-28 00:00:00 | by Imadjinn | [ Reply to This ]
  This is really a clever write
You included the positive and negative of christmas and put them both together perfectly
I like how you ended with the positive
Showing us all once again
Thay Positve Energy always beats negative energy
Take Care
Ron
| Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  awww...there is nothing bad i can possibly say about this!i love how you put it all together;from the stores getting ready to the warm bed cuddling with the special someone.
it flowed very nicely & i like it alot.
short but nice.
Merry Christmas!
_dancing_alone_
| Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by _Dancing_Alone_ | [ Reply to This ]
  Well MIMI as i expected a wonderful piece coming with such passion and sensitivity and touches the strings of anyone's heart , a nice and wonderful piece of work , keep it up :) your heart will find its warmth
| Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by Tarek Refaat | [ Reply to This ]


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