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Stand With Me

Author: Nynaeve
ASL Info:    23, female, Israel
Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 43 /67 /28
Words: 75
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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It's about love in a way....when someone knows that a relationship isn't working anymore because of him/her... but deep inside they still think there's a way to fix it. So the poem starts with resignation... then a cry for another chance...and then resignation again, sealing it up neatly.

Stand With Me

Tell me
I don't care if it breaks me.
Say it
I don't care if it hurts so bad.

Trust me
I will hold like a mountain
I will see that you truly tried.

Don't send me away
Let me learn And err
Please, remember the days
Of pureness and joy

Until I drove you away
Until i've ruined it all
And on that final day
I died whole.

Submitted on 2005-12-18 14:24:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was pretty good. I can relate to this. I am having problems with my boyfriend. I love him more than life but we are having some problems. He does stuff that he knows will make me mad at him. But he would rather have my sister like him, then me happy. It really upsets me. But i guess i get too upset over it. anyway, this hit close to that, so i enjoyed it very much.

| Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by Akai_Ame | [ Reply to This ]
  I like the way you phrase the often overplayed message of 'Tell me if it's over', and the changes in tempo really punctuate the message well. It works well.

| Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by scienceyear | [ Reply to This ]

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