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    dots Submission Name: im already gonedots
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    Author: _Dancing_Alone_
    ASL Info:    14/f/and...MARS.
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 91/96/36
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 250
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1468



    Description:
       i have been so obsessed about this song.
    it means alot to me & i hope people like it.
    im not sure about the wording,i know i used some words more than i should so maybe i'll revise it later but,just tell me what you think about it anyway.


    i know comments are sometimes hard to give but i would really appreciate it if u would.


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    dotsim already gonedots
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    i've tried so many times,
    to open up my mind.
    but how can i realize,
    i've been left behind.
    nothing to hold on to,
    no-one to let go.
    i've given up on this confusion,
    i just want to fly home.

    i've been awake for long,
    but still sleep in my dreams.
    this illusion's got me grounded,
    but things aren't what they seem.
    home is where the heart is,
    but my heart has run away.

    Chorus:
    im already gone,this is how i feel.
    the song that strums along,is this really real?
    my faith is far too lost,no hope to bring it back.
    the love i've carried on,
    is hiding in my soul & won't come out.

    im now on my own,
    since i've lost my soul.
    my love has been thrown out.
    to sorrow i belong.
    can't find the way out,can't find who did me in.
    but someday i'll be back,find my heart again.
    too weak to end this pain,
    still tired to find my place.
    but i'll redeem myself someday,in this truth i believe.

    have i gone too far?
    and stuck myself too deep.
    as the tragic movie ends,
    it replays in my head again.
    still so many clones,in this superficial world.
    stereotypes pass me by,
    i cant find my best friend.







    Submitted on 2005-12-18 17:25:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this was great i am surprised you didnt get comments alot of people dont comment on what they read not sure why
    great post and enjoyable read
    | Posted on 2005-12-23 00:00:00 | by psychoneurosis | [ Reply to This ]
      This was great. It had a load of feeling in it and made a lot of sense to me. I can relate as well. It was a very beautiful song and I can see why it would stick with you.
    | Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by Toxic_Rayne | [ Reply to This ]
      nice nooooooo great write it was a lil sad but hey i hope u can get over it i really like ur chorus alot overall this was a great write i liked it alot ood job
    | Posted on 2005-12-18 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]



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