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    dots Submission Name: peacedots
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    Author: jbb360
    ASL Info:    22.m.wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 25/36/12
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    the water laps gently against your legs
    as your feet slide slowly
    into the soft sand
    as the gently breeze cools your neck
    you gaze longly across the ocean
    following it from your feet
    to where it forms a seamless union with the sky
    the sun hangs upon it
    perfectly framed
    like a picture hung on an empty wall
    the gently lapping of the tide
    creates a melody that dances in your ears
    as your nose becomes enamoured
    with the smell of the saltly waters
    the fresh ocean air fills your lungs
    till you breath out
    the breathe of perfect relaxation

    the father wraps his arms around you
    comforting you
    in times of need
    a soft shoulder and steady hands
    an understanding of you
    that streatchs beyond
    your understanding of your self
    his peace is true
    and everlasting
    even after the oceans, sun, and sand
    fade away




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