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    dots Submission Name: Creeps Out of the Evergreensdots
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    Author: Jester_Gesture
    ASL Info:    23/f
    Elite Ratio:    3.41 - 365/459/201
    Words: 334
    Class/Type: Prose/Love
    Total Views: 614
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    Bytes: 2165



    Description:
       Twenty-one hours spent fighting, finding, leaving and loving each other. For Cannon. "Anyway... I don't know..."

    [I rewrote it. Still the same subjects, progressions, transitions, emotions, etc. The format is just different. I am quite fond of Roman numeral-ed words.]


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    dotsCreeps Out of the Evergreensdots
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    I

    Eyes wide. Enamored with your
    motion. Arms, legs, your skull
    shaking away distractions of the crowd.
    Hear me shout your name, feel
    my love you, pushing you to the limit.
    I am joyful, and yet jealous, as I watch
    your fingers brush the sky.

    II

    After you’ve basked in your glory,
    you return from the battle field and
    rest near me. Little birds and Hermes duplicates
    speak to you behind my back. I enforced it,
    but the outcomes break my heart.
    You do not want me.
    I flee into the night, and hiding in the moonshadow,
    weep into the steps of my sanctuary.

    III

    Coming out of the night, my back turned to you
    for good this time. Yet, messengers
    still urging me to give you another chance.
    Is this what I wanted? All this time?
    This mercy, this grace, coming into sight
    with the slow rise of the moon.

    IV

    Convinced.
    With a tilt of my head, I see
    that you are not occupied
    for once
    and we step into the darkness
    through the trees.

    V

    There is barely a moment before you say,
    “come here,” and pull me to you.
    Surrounded, encircled, warmed
    by your tired limbs, wrapped in your arms.
    I can hear your heart beating, my head
    on your chest, your words soothing in my ear.

    VI

    As we stand in the shadows—intimate, kissless
    —my eyes flutter closed and I grow faint.
    The world fades; there is only this embrace,
    this spinning of only you and me. Only this moment.

    VII

    The moon creeps out of the evergreens
    and the fog crawls under our collars:
    we shiver; speak; walk; breathe
    in the cold twilight, between branches.
    Pain becomes euphoria: with chattering teeth
    we laugh. When the night ends this battle,
    when I feel drunk or high or something
    (the reaction of second chances),
    when I have found mercy.




    Submitted on 2005-12-19 00:26:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was well written & I really liked the title too. Seemed to have an old-timey feel to it but I could've done without the Roman numerals because of the length of the stanzas.
    Great!
    Love,Peace,Joy&Smiles 2 share
    tif
    | Posted on 2006-01-03 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      You took my breath away! You have a amazing talent. You just laid your soul out for all to see in this piece. I loved the the way you had it set up like sonnets. Just beautiful.
    Love and Peace,
    lynn
    | Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]


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