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    dots Submission Name: for charmedidentitydots

    Author: jermwerm
    ASL Info:    26/m/FRESNO CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.29 - 203/268/83
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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        I wrote this for one of my favorite poets on this site. She is one of the few artisticly talented ones.

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    dotsfor charmedidentitydots

    Phrases written in silver moonlight. Storms of haunting dreams, truth of tales wrote so deep.

    Poems dance an artistic night. Writtings laced with dawns cresently glowing, deeper than winged tombes of awe.

    Past the halls lit with laughs, beond those doors of minds who wrath. Limitless dark touch of bliss. Teathered blindly sewn golden rich.

    Vacant midnights spoonfed to sunshine, saddness sleeps on wakeing eye. A legend with beauty, us readers feel and see. Spiritually so charmed your identity.

    Submitted on 2005-12-19 05:39:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      a few spelling grammers and a little confusing from time to time, but i liked it. its good but it can be better, think of how you really feel about this person's writing and talk about that, focus on transfering that into a poem of strong meaning and powerful grasp, then you will have correctly made a poem of someone else, or atleast thats how i see it in my eyes. but thats just my comments, you can do as you please and i did like your poem but i think that if you added more depth to it and more emotion and more meaning then it would be strong and grasping. good job, thank you for taking the time to make this, i enjoyed it.

    | Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by insphered soul | [ Reply to This ]

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