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    dots Submission Name: Tidesdots
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    Author: ebflannery
    ASL Info:    24/
    Elite Ratio:    4.6 - 184/184/48
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsTidesdots
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    Do not worry,
    We will be all right
    So relax, bend with the breeze
    I know you are afraid
    And so am I
    But the future is yet to be seen
    We may not have much
    To call our own
    And to many bills
    We need to pay
    Money is scarce
    And times are hard
    But my love will not fade
    So together we will walk
    Or crawl if we fall
    And together we will rise
    Fortune is an ocean
    Vast and mysterious
    Changing forever
    With the tide




    Submitted on 2005-12-19 18:54:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow..

    I wrote a poem also called tides.. But i likened the tides to emotions..
    Here you likened it to fortune..

    This is quite a beautiful poem..
    I actually didnt like so much how the first part is about love and sticking together despite anything, then the ending is about money (i gather at least) Usually the point of a poem is in the final few verses.. and if so.. this love poem turned out to be rather not so much about love..

    but..
    I really liked this..

    "But my love will not fade
    So together we will walk
    Or crawl if we fall
    And together we will rise"

    Awesome stanza..

    The whole poem feels like a whisper right from the beggining.. good job on this..
    I liked it overall..

    shaun
    | Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by shanu | [ Reply to This ]
      This is beautiful. It shows that love is stronger than anything, and it will get you through rough times. Well, that's my interpretation of it anyway.

    Piper
    | Posted on 2006-07-07 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
      this was a very simple, straightforward piece, but I mean it in a good way. to me, it sort of represents the honesty that a lot of relationships lack, which becomes the reason for the failure of the relationship. sometimes both sides of the balance just don't express what they really feel to each other, and it only ends up with misunderstandings, so at the end of it, there's no balance left, really. haha. on the poem itself, I really liked it, I thought it flowed well (haha excuse the pun), and it expressed what it should in not too many words, and not too less. well done.
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by zhi wei | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this tells it like it is when in love--it's together we run and together we will fall or crawl, and that is how it should be...doesn't leave much more for me to say--happy holidays to you and yours
    lamemansterms
    | Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
      Not 2 much depth in this one unfortunatly, but hey, I cant even spell, so its cool lol. It does, however, bring a sweet warm little sense of th@ everlasting love th@'ll get u thru anything, th@ every1 dreams of & if u have th@, then more power 2 u :-D & Yes, its true, the very earth beneath our feet moves 4rm underneath us, but having someone to love somehow makes it all better, a bit of a haven. Thanx 4 sharing :-D Ciao ~Rachel~
    | Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by Aprie Chick | [ Reply to This ]


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