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Author:	ebflannery
ASL Info:	24/
Elite Ratio:	4.6 - 184/184/48
Words:	91

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	198
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	541

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Tides

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Do not worry,
We will be all right
So relax, bend with the breeze
I know you are afraid
And so am I
But the future is yet to be seen
We may not have much
To call our own
And to many bills
We need to pay
Money is scarce
And times are hard
But my love will not fade
So together we will walk
Or crawl if we fall
And together we will rise
Fortune is an ocean
Vast and mysterious
Changing forever
With the tide

Submitted on 2005-12-19 18:54:26 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  wow..

I wrote a poem also called tides.. But i likened the tides to emotions..
Here you likened it to fortune..

This is quite a beautiful poem..
I actually didnt like so much how the first part is about love and sticking together despite anything, then the ending is about money (i gather at least) Usually the point of a poem is in the final few verses.. and if so.. this love poem turned out to be rather not so much about love..

but..
I really liked this..

"But my love will not fade
So together we will walk
Or crawl if we fall
And together we will rise"

Awesome stanza..

The whole poem feels like a whisper right from the beggining.. good job on this..
I liked it overall..

shaun
| Posted on 2006-06-18 00:00:00 | by shanu | [ Reply to This ]
  This is beautiful. It shows that love is stronger than anything, and it will get you through rough times. Well, that's my interpretation of it anyway.

Piper
| Posted on 2006-07-07 00:00:00 | by PiperH | [ Reply to This ]
  this was a very simple, straightforward piece, but I mean it in a good way. to me, it sort of represents the honesty that a lot of relationships lack, which becomes the reason for the failure of the relationship. sometimes both sides of the balance just don't express what they really feel to each other, and it only ends up with misunderstandings, so at the end of it, there's no balance left, really. haha. on the poem itself, I really liked it, I thought it flowed well (haha excuse the pun), and it expressed what it should in not too many words, and not too less. well done.
| Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by zhi wei | [ Reply to This ]
  I think this tells it like it is when in love--it's together we run and together we will fall or crawl, and that is how it should be...doesn't leave much more for me to say--happy holidays to you and yours
lamemansterms
| Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
  Not 2 much depth in this one unfortunatly, but hey, I cant even spell, so its cool lol. It does, however, bring a sweet warm little sense of th@ everlasting love th@'ll get u thru anything, th@ every1 dreams of & if u have th@, then more power 2 u :-D & Yes, its true, the very earth beneath our feet moves 4rm underneath us, but having someone to love somehow makes it all better, a bit of a haven. Thanx 4 sharing :-D Ciao ~Rachel~
| Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by Aprie Chick | [ Reply to This ]

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