Description: For feedback I just want everyones honest opinions....I haven't written a poem in a long time...so I'm just getting back into it...when i wrote this i was really confused obviously trying to decide between 2 things....I want to know if anyone can relate my poem to a situation in there life...I just want some honest opinions
I stand Here
With two paths before me
One I have taken many times
But only gone in circles
The other is new
But with many obsticales on the way
I think about the first path
I feel so afraid
The disappointment I feel
When I end up where I started
Is more than I can take
But maybe there's a short cut
A hidden path I could not see
But if I take the first
The second will disappear
Overgrown with thorns and vines
Blending with the trees
I liked this poem. I can relate to the situation in this poem a lot. I had to make a decision like this recently. Didn't really turn out like I'd hoped... But yes, about your poem... It was wonderful. It flowed really nicely and it displayed the emotions of the situation very well. Very good job here.
this was good Kay I liked it but like someon of one of the others said u could of explanded it more and gave it more power but for what i beleive is the first poem of yours I've read I liked it . It shows talent and potentional keep it up
Your poem has a very clear and meaningful meaning...it is really great how so many peoplecan relate well to this subconsius poem..keep up the good work...great poem
i like the poem its really good but it just feels to me that u could have written more. just feels a bit incomplete but its really good it makes u want to read more... neway keep the good work up.
This is well done and very thought provoking. I feel that your poem speaks to all of us as we all choose to go the old familiar way even though we know the pitfalls. Perhaps because the evil we know seems less frightening than the unknown, possably better path. I like the free verse with no rhyming. I feel like we had a chat . go for the new road! Great poem.
Submission Name: Divided
