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    dots Submission Name: Divideddots

    Author: kapri49
    ASL Info:    16/f/canada
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 31/69/30
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 858
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       For feedback I just want everyones honest opinions....I haven't written a poem in a long time...so I'm just getting back into it...when i wrote this i was really confused obviously trying to decide between 2 things....I want to know if anyone can relate my poem to a situation in there life...I just want some honest opinions

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    I stand Here
    With two paths before me
    One I have taken many times
    But only gone in circles
    The other is new
    But with many obsticales on the way
    I think about the first path
    I feel so afraid
    The disappointment I feel
    When I end up where I started
    Is more than I can take
    But maybe there's a short cut
    A hidden path I could not see
    But if I take the first
    The second will disappear
    Overgrown with thorns and vines
    Blending with the trees

    Submitted on 2005-12-19 19:37:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this poem. I can relate to the situation in this poem a lot. I had to make a decision like this recently. Didn't really turn out like I'd hoped...
    But yes, about your poem... It was wonderful. It flowed really nicely and it displayed the emotions of the situation very well. Very good job here.
    | Posted on 2006-01-15 00:00:00 | by jessie thomas | [ Reply to This ]
      this was good Kay I liked it but like someon of one of the others said u could of explanded it more and gave it more power but for what i beleive is the first poem of yours I've read I liked it . It shows talent and potentional keep it up
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by in_my_suffering | [ Reply to This ]
      Your poem has a very clear and meaningful meaning...it is really great how so many peoplecan relate well to this subconsius poem..keep up the good work...great poem
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Hip-Hop Honey | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the poem its really good but it just feels to me that u could have written more. just feels a bit incomplete but its really good it makes u want to read more... neway keep the good work up.
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by submarine | [ Reply to This ]
      This is well done and very thought provoking. I feel that your poem speaks to all of us as we all choose to go the old familiar way even though we know the pitfalls. Perhaps because the evil we know seems less frightening than the unknown, possably better path. I like the free verse with no rhyming. I feel like we had a chat . go for the new road! Great poem.
    | Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by Jerilynn | [ Reply to This ]

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