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    dots Submission Name: Delusions of Grandeurdots
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    Author: angelfyre
    ASL Info:    17/yes please/here
    Elite Ratio:    4.07 - 254/238/76
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 256
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       Me and my brother wrote this. Me n Gare.


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    dotsDelusions of Grandeurdots
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    Sweet lady bug in the night
    Steer clear of this floundering moonlight
    Don't curse me again with those predictable spots,
    I rather not be laughed at, when my stomach is already in knots
    So brilliant and yet so far out of place
    I bare down harder with my teeth, but the tears still refuse to flee
    Why can't you lose it with me
    Don't stain my idea of perfection
    Deluded dreams of heaven
    Don't leave me helpless
    Hopeless
    Misguided
    Those flecks of gold,
    Gorgeous footprints,
    Depressions left in the walls of my heart
    Had no defense for this damaging expression
    I feel as though this epiphany,
    Is now but a meer shadow mocking the world behind me
    Stepping past it's boundaries
    And leaving me to retrace the path
    That the bug took before blinding me




    Submitted on 2005-12-19 19:53:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow, I really liked this... I don't even know why... The lady bug metaphor throughout struck me as not only interesting, but rather familiar. It reminds me of an old piece I wrote involving a firefly... I also think the general topic of a mocking, biting, digging person spoiling dreams of perfection appeals to me a lot right now. It reminds me of a good friend who has hurt many people with his words and actions and really disillusioned many naive kids about the evils of our world... Anyway, enough about my personal bull[censored]... I just wanted to let you know that I enjoyed reading this. Keep up the good work

    -Chris Meckes Jr.
    | Posted on 2005-12-22 00:00:00 | by Meckes | [ Reply to This ]
      Gary is a damn sweetheart, so Krystal is it?
    about time I got a chance to butt heads with the girl genius haha, hey no disrespect now, I really think you guys have a good tag team going in the poetry corner, uh huh
    so who came up with the lady bug idea?
    Love, C.
    | Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by Bred By Words | [ Reply to This ]



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