Description: Seasonally appropriate, but in need of help. I will appreciate your comments. Thanks
And Mary Thought -------------------------------------------
I remember when
The Angel came and told me
That I would bare
The only son of God
And that he’d be a king
And save his people
They would call him
Wonderful, marvelous.
How can that be the future
Of this baby boy
Who waves his arms
And kicks his feet
Who grasps my finger
With his tiny hand
As I reach to touch
His smooth soft baby cheek
He isn’t just
The first born of the father
The Savior of mankind, Emanuel
He’s my little baby
And I love him
More than any words could ever tell
I look at all
The faces gathered ‘round us
As they gazed in wonder
At my little babe
The shepherds, and the wise men
And the travelers
Come to worship god
For the gift He gave
How can they be sure
He’s the one sent to them
As they lay their priceless gifts
Down at his feet
Does he then look
So very like his father
Instead of just the baby soft and sweet
I felt a stab of fear
From deep inside me
As I gazed at Jesus sleeping peacefully
I could hardly see
as tears began to gather
and I wiped them from my eyes
And off my cheek
To all the world
He is the blessed redeemer
But he is just
My precious babe to me
Then I saw the gates
Of heaven open widely
And I heard ten thousand angel voices sing
Then I saw the glory of my God almighty
And I knew that he’d take care of everything
I like this fresh perspective on the Virgin Birth! You captured a mother's fears very well, and the ending is comforting and true, because she chose to trust in God.
Again, I think that you should play around with the formatting, split the lines into stanzas, and not start every line with caps. Oh, and if i'm not mistaken, 'bare' in the 3rd line should be 'bear'.
I agree, it was a very good take on Mary. I liked the way you emphasised that mother's will always be mother's above all else. That is what mother's are best at. A very good and timely write.
Wow! This was beautifully written. I never thought about the brht of Jesus from Mary's point of view before. You painted a vivid picture of motherly love and joy. It did not seem like a poem but more like the start to a short story or novel. It was just wonderful. It flowed great. And it had dephtness to it. I could relate to Mary. You hit a jackpot here.
Submission Name: And Mary Thought
