Description: no real description, don't know where it came from, but I laid in bed too long so this is really only the ghost of what I had in my head. Any comments or critiques greatly appreciated.
the tear -------------------------------------------
and yet most powerful-
display of emotion,
and what a range of emotion can be displayed:
anger and fear,
laughter and joy,
all announced by one tiny drop of briny moisture,
one salt-water streak down someone's face-
the kryptonite of every "super"man
and every woman's final weapon-
This is a good poem touching on the profound ability of the tear. It is funny how such a primal emotion can bring forth such a response and sad in a way, how some women seem to use this as a weapon. It kind of takes the sincerity away from a feeling that should be sincere and heartfelt. As a woman I must say that when a man cries it has a profound effect on me. Not only does it show that he is sensitive and comfortable enough in his manhood to display such a feeling but also that he has a warm and caring heart. So, as much as a woman's tear has an effect on a man, it has just as much effect on a woman when a man cries. In fact, it may even be more powerful a weapon for a man as a woman is expected to cry where as a man is expected to be strong and not show this emotion. A man could really use this as the ultimate weapon as it makes him seem gentle and in touch with his feelings, when all the while it is a most effective manipulation. This is a very thought provoking well written poem. I have given you some insight from a different perspective. hee hee! Take care.
That's true it is just about every man's weakness, and just about every womans last weapon. I liked it, it expresses things that most people don't really think about. I also liked the way it explains the uses of a tear. Georgina
This is a very good poem I really like it. I think however you should be evasive about what the subject is. I think that if you were to beat around the bush about what it is it would catch more attention. I mean that this is beautiful tha way it is but if you were to add in other elements like mystery it would be one hell of a poem. "the kryptonite of every "super"man" this line has to be my favorite line in the whole poem because for most men it is true. I would also like to see you get into detail about one emotion that would really set off a trigger for a barage of tears. In the future I really look forward to seeing more of your work and I hope that this all helps. I'm adding this to my faves. *~Krystina~*
Beautiful Exceptinally written I write a lot of poems about tears You might want to check out Healing Orbs Of Water A write of mine I think you will like it God Bless Your Friend Ron I hope your little angel is doing well!
This is a nice poem. I like the simplicity of the idea (I consider simplicity a good thing). Your hyphens should be dashes though (In most word processors you type two hyphens and hit enter to make a dash, but some won't, so two hyphens typed together are considered equivalent). I liked the superman line best too, Amy
A very powerful way to describe the emotions of such a tiny thing as a tear drop,The kryptonite of ever "super" man, wonderful line maybe its because I've never thought of a mans tears in such a way, but oh how so true it is,lots of luck and joy on your new addition to your family,keep tapping those keys am looking frward to read more of your works adnil