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    dots Submission Name: Sweet love adieudots
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    Author: Namlooc20
    ASL Info:    26/Male/Spokane, WA
    Elite Ratio:    4.2 - 359/327/107
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1020
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       I think that is the word I was looking for... "adeu" right...tell me If I'm wrong and I'll change it but whatever. This is another installment of the 12th street saga. I lose the love of my life in this one, it doesn't say it yet but it will happen next. This isn't a real life thing it's just I had to get off the phone quick because I was about to get in trouble with my folks and she took it as a dis I think... so yeah. here is "sweet love adeu" THNX

    - Nammy


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    dotsSweet love adieudots
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    So as midnight strolls
    along from mine
    clock in hand
    alone with knife
    something so strange
    yet delicate at heart
    mystifies my hope
    with nothing to discard

    Waiting near the phone
    So dankly in the dark
    Making sure not to disturb
    My angsty teenager love

    So I say "my love,
    godnight to thee
    I'll love you forever
    as much as can be"

    But you resist
    say no, throw a fit
    with nothing to discover
    but my undying lips

    fretting so close
    to the edge of my break
    nothing but love
    in this day and age

    So fly with me
    on my dreams you see
    nothing but darkness
    with you and me

    You see the crying
    The love
    The Fear
    You see the fighting
    The crushed
    Revered

    You see the yes's
    the no's and maybe's
    you see the love you
    nothing will change that baby

    You see my sigh as I say
    "life really was sweet"
    I pull my knife out and swing
    "welcome to 12th street"




    Submitted on 2005-12-20 02:07:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You know, I never came to read this, but I always looked at the title and wondered "Hmm, what's that about? I'll read it sometime, maybe tomorrow..." I'm glad I decided to read it tonight, of all nights.
    Broken as I may be, I have come to the conclusion that I must don the mask that I wore before my love. I've pieced it back together now, because he had shattered it, and made me never want it back. But now he shattered ME. And the mask is one piece again.
    This poem is brilliant, and completely dragging me in, making me cry, making me shake my head wondering why life is so cruel to me.
    Thanks for this gift, Kyle. Even though you didn't realize it was one.

    Kichi (Brynna)
    | Posted on 2006-03-29 00:00:00 | by Raging Rain | [ Reply to This ]
      *stare* Kyle. It's ADIEU, babe.
    It's French for "farewell." As in "GOODBYE" for the very *LAST* time.
    And no, I did not take it as a dis. ...Dangit, man,
    it happens all the time. Do I think it's your fault? Eh. No. Not really.

    *pause*

    Donít listen to that, please. Iím just being oversensitive again.
    In reality, I really thought ďcool. :3 Itís a decent write by Kyle.
    Itís pretty, and Kyle-like. Yay.Ē Although I have no real advice other than spelling...o.o

    Iím not treating you the way I should when I get frusterated
    Over nothingÖ

    ;_; Sowwy.
    <3Mi
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, that was really good...I totally got the point...I think I am gonna add it to my favorites if you don't mind :-)...The only thing wrong was some spelling errors...but other than that it was great :-)...Keep writing

    -Nichole
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by fallenpopcorn10 | [ Reply to This ]


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