Description: I think that is the word I was looking for... "adeu" right...tell me If I'm wrong and I'll change it but whatever. This is another installment of the 12th street saga. I lose the love of my life in this one, it doesn't say it yet but it will happen next. This isn't a real life thing it's just I had to get off the phone quick because I was about to get in trouble with my folks and she took it as a dis I think... so yeah. here is "sweet love adeu" THNX
- Nammy
Sweet love adieu -------------------------------------------
So as midnight strolls
along from mine
clock in hand
alone with knife
something so strange
yet delicate at heart
mystifies my hope
with nothing to discard
Waiting near the phone
So dankly in the dark
Making sure not to disturb
My angsty teenager love
So I say "my love,
godnight to thee
I'll love you forever
as much as can be"
But you resist
say no, throw a fit
with nothing to discover
but my undying lips
fretting so close
to the edge of my break
nothing but love
in this day and age
So fly with me
on my dreams you see
nothing but darkness
with you and me
You see the crying
The love
The Fear
You see the fighting
The crushed
Revered
You see the yes's
the no's and maybe's
you see the love you
nothing will change that baby
You see my sigh as I say
"life really was sweet"
I pull my knife out and swing
"welcome to 12th street"
You know, I never came to read this, but I always looked at the title and wondered "Hmm, what's that about? I'll read it sometime, maybe tomorrow..." I'm glad I decided to read it tonight, of all nights. Broken as I may be, I have come to the conclusion that I must don the mask that I wore before my love. I've pieced it back together now, because he had shattered it, and made me never want it back. But now he shattered ME. And the mask is one piece again. This poem is brilliant, and completely dragging me in, making me cry, making me shake my head wondering why life is so cruel to me. Thanks for this gift, Kyle. Even though you didn't realize it was one.
*stare* Kyle. It's ADIEU, babe. It's French for "farewell." As in "GOODBYE" for the very *LAST* time. And no, I did not take it as a dis. ...Dangit, man, it happens all the time. Do I think it's your fault? Eh. No. Not really.
*pause*
Don’t listen to that, please. I’m just being oversensitive again. In reality, I really thought “cool. :3 It’s a decent write by Kyle. It’s pretty, and Kyle-like. Yay.” Although I have no real advice other than spelling...o.o
I’m not treating you the way I should when I get frusterated Over nothing…
Wow, that was really good...I totally got the point...I think I am gonna add it to my favorites if you don't mind :-)...The only thing wrong was some spelling errors...but other than that it was great :-)...Keep writing
Submission Name: Sweet love adieu
