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    dots Submission Name: Thank Youdots
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    Author: K
    ASL Info:    26/Namibia/Africa
    Elite Ratio:    5.64 - 183/172/46
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       A poem that is suppose to have some sort of religious context. Don't know if that is what I succeed in here.

    I would appreciate any comments.


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    dotsThank Youdots
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    Thank you for the birds that sing and fly in the sky,
    they bring the message that says no worries this is a new day.
    Be happy and grateful for all that you have and do not have,
    for some have less and are content; while some have too much and they never rest.

    Be thankful for the gift of sight,
    for without it there would be no smiling faces, no sunsets, no light.
    Green would not be filled with promise
    for in every bud lies new life in but just one colour of natureís gigantic palette.

    Thank you for sorrow, anger and despair,
    without it we would not appreciate laughter, forgiveness nor joy.
    Love would mean nothing, for without hate, what is it?
    Just another four letter word spelled l-o-v and e.

    What would life be without taste buds, Lord?
    The beer bitter less; just another liquid that bubbles and foams at the top.
    I canít imagine my life without the taste of my beer!
    Nor could I imagine the lips of my lover not tasting like cherry or musk.

    Thereís so much to be thankful for, but it would not be complete
    if I didnít thank You for the beautiful creatures Adam called woman.
    Life without their nagging and whining
    would not drive men to alcohol and other women.

    Thank you Lord for women.




    Submitted on 2005-12-20 07:36:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the whole concept of the story. One major thing to change would be beer. If it's supposed to be religious in a way replace it with a non-alcoholic drink or even wine would be better to say. I dont really know what else to say about this except fix those two for now.
    | Posted on 2005-12-30 00:00:00 | by musclebound350 | [ Reply to This ]


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