I know this is supposed to be sad, and it is, but at first I burst out laughing because I kept thinking of that stupid soap opera, days of our lives. (My mother is a fanatic!) & so the phrase "like sands through the hourglass so are the days of our lives" kept repeating in my mind.
But I re-read it without thinking of that once & I found it very calm, scerene, reminded me of lazy days in the summertime.
Hey,Dreamer,so sorry for not commenting on this earlier..I've been super busy! lol Well,I really love this one because of the way it made me think.I'd tried so hard to see into your reason;the thought you're trying to protray.It was difficult to see,yes,but I think I figured it out.I see this as not only beautiful,but pure genius.You must have put a many of hour of thought to this,but who I am to questoin such an artist?The message I see is that the hourglass,or 'time' persay,is the cause of your sorrow.That time has slurred your haunted history of which is a mystery to not only us,but also you.That time has used such a passive stradegy to cause your tradegy,or sorrow.So,now,that you are at your end and hold the hourglass in your hands,you want the mystics and soothe-sayers and the other people who deal with the supernatural,I guess,to listen so they can hear a most awful tale about a such terrible misery that no-one even the greatest of dectecting minds could find once it was killed.And you tell them to ask two of the oldest and most beautiful things to tell them all that they know...At the end of your tale,you say to "give the hourglass to me so that I can be rid of it for all the evil it has done"...Well,that's my god-awful rant and theory of what this means!I think that what I have said makes no earthly sense,but that's up to you.I hope that I have a good grasp upon what it means and I hope to see another one of your works very soon,since you know that I absolutely adore your work!So,happy holidays and God bless...Maybe soon,he'll heal your terrible heart-ache... :) - Lindel
i realy like this one it's goin on my fave list. i like the smoothness of the flow and just the feel i get from it. i feel as if i could actually get ahold of the hour glass. i also feel the need to turn back time and just correct all the bad events, i realy think this is a great poem thx for posting it.
Yeah this was great. I loved the theme. Oh how i wish i could just smash the hour glass and stop the toll of time forever. i loved the last part. It just finishes the poem off very well. Well this is going to my Favs list.
Instant favorite. I don't this is very sad it is beautiful...to me anyway. It is astonishing and just blows me away. "a melancholy mystery haunts my history a passive strategy to fulfill my tragedy " This stanza is beautifl and it gives me the chills. Another one of the stanzas I loved was "beckon the breeze for all it sees romance the rose for all it knows" Just beautiful! I don't see sadness in this poem but beauty it is an amazing poem. I hope that in the future I get to read more of your work. Krystina
I like this very much but I do have some suggestions:
of soothes and seers of mediums and mystics of angles and heretics
I think it should be 'soothsayers and seers' and 'angels and heretics'
just some nitpicking, no big deal.
it flows really well and has neat sounds to it. and the rhyming is pretty good although a mite predictable. still, it's good--I don't like to comment harshly or offensively and don't need to here. nice job.