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    dots Submission Name: And Joseph Thoughtdots
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    Author: Jerilynn
    ASL Info:    59, woman, U.S.A.
    Elite Ratio:    3.53 - 68/66/20
    Words: 283
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1183
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       Another seasonal tribute to a great man. did you ever wonder what he felt?


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    dotsAnd Joseph Thoughtdots
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    Joseph gazed down on the hay
    Where Mary and the baby lay
    His heart was filled with tenderness
    As he stood guard over their rest

    He was not ashamed as he felt his tears
    As he pondered events of this last year
    How hed been so angry that hed raved
    When Mary had told him of the babe

    She thought that she had been untrue
    And though he loved her, Joseph knew
    He could not take her as his wife
    And live a lie for his whole life

    He was troubled as he went to bed
    His life felt empty, and his heart felt dead
    How could she do this thing to me
    And tell that story, and expect me to believe

    As he tossed and turned and moaned and cried
    His room was suddenly filled with light
    An angel seemed to fill the room
    His very presence chased out the gloom



    Who are you? What do you want from me?
    Im here to give you eyes that see.
    Do not fear to take your bride.
    She told the truth, she did not lie

    Mary is Gods chosen one
    The babe she carries is Gods son
    But Joseph you were chosen to
    To raise him up like one of you

    He needs to learn the ways of men
    To help the Father in his plan
    Hell receive help from up above
    To teach the world of Gods love

    You will be guided through the years
    And blessed by god, so dry your tears
    You are to raise the chosen one
    As if He were you very own son.




    Submitted on 2005-12-20 13:40:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A nice retake on a biblical tale. I liked that you went into the mind of Joseph, covering his fears and revalations. I do think the "And" in the line:
    " And tell that story, and expect me to believe"
    is a little redundant. Perhaps the word "to" at the beginning? I think that is how I would have worded it any how. Great write!
    | Posted on 2008-02-16 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      A nice story and the slant you put on it made it a very enjoyable read. Xmas should always be a time of reflection and joy for all. Hard to achieve sometimes though.
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      This is pretty. To be honest, I'm not religious and haven't read this story in the bible. But it's infamous and...
    it's really-
    it describes the doubts in his heart and makes him seem more real, as a person. n_n All stories have meaning, even if they aren't proven to be true, you know?
    I like it alot ;_;
    -Mi<3
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]


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