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    dots Submission Name: recognitiondots
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    Author: ymf
    Elite Ratio:    0.01 - 0/2/1
    Words: 184
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsrecognitiondots
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    Hidden in the shadows for years
    creeping up to get some sort of recognition
    after all this time that has past them
    like it did not mean anything
    that they both knew nothing about one another.
    Still childishly afraid to look at the face
    he made.
    His own face,
    looks back at him.

    Two different people
    with the same eyes,
    the same smile.
    Every other look,
    being his.

    He did not mean for it to be this way.
    But if he had the chance,
    Would he change it?

    His baby is all grown up
    got a mind of her own.
    Now is only quietly questioning,
    Why he was left in the shadows
    only now to be brought out
    to show what happened,
    was partly his mistake.

    He needed to do this for himself,
    but also for her.
    His heart could not be at peace,
    nor could he be at ease.
    He wants to buy her the world
    to make her happy.
    But him recognizing her as his daughter
    For the first time in years,
    is the world.
    ©ymf2005




    Submitted on 2005-12-20 13:43:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      His own face,
    looks back at him.>

    I liked that. Face would have been better if replaced by Frown I say that cause I was impressed when I thought it said that before it was face, but the line is still awesome. Really good Father/Daughter piece.
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by thetwilight | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked that. It actually had almost no poetic flow but I like the way you wrote it because I could tell that it was about a father and daughter before it was actually mentioned.
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by sinister_always | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


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