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    dots Submission Name: Tears of Broken Glassdots
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    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       I started this looking at a picture I took of a broken windshield of a rolled truck....? hmmm...sometimes the muse has something in mind that <@> can't see....he he he

    Merry Christmas friends of Elite!

    Love,Peace,Joy~Feel,Experience,BE~~~
    tif


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    dotsTears of Broken Glassdots
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    When will tomorrow ever come to pass
    as <@> lay here crying tears of broken glass

    Shards of crystal, filled with brass
    sands of X
    building class

    Take a chance
    speak up
    or pass

    The sky is falling
    speak your sins
    en masse




    Submitted on 2005-12-20 14:09:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like the shortness and the fact that the point is crystal clear. Honesty is what i see. That may not make sense to many, but I guess it only has to make sense to the reader. It takes a strong talent to show so much emotion in with so few words. i look forward to reading more!
    | Posted on 2006-02-08 00:00:00 | by nicklacymatthew | [ Reply to This ]
      I didn't really understand this one, especially with all the symbols. I think it would have great potential if it had some more clarity...however...it looks like I'm the only one that didn't get it, lol. That's nothin new though!
    | Posted on 2006-01-27 00:00:00 | by Raindrops | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this was so nice. I loved the clarity you gave of the glass tears. This was brief, but powerful. This was very vivid. And it flowed just great. I loved everything about this.

    Maggie
    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]
      speak it. you have the power. i have chills, hitting the nail on the head, goosebumps. Thank you.
    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by Lil gal | [ Reply to This ]
      Tiff, you have great poetic insight. It shows when you can see something, such as the broken windshield, and write a poem about it in the way you did here.
    It's sad and poignant.. and a good write for the holidays, maybe it will make others "think" before getting behind the wheel.
    Nicely done!
    ~Sandra
    | Posted on 2005-12-24 00:00:00 | by Intricate1 | [ Reply to This ]
      In terms of karmic notions this one hits the mark Tif. I feel lucky that I'm warned in less dramatic ways, I think you are too.

    Nice job pinning this one down, life is a wreck for the victims and has come to a screeching halt. My metaphorical prayers descend, great job.

    peace and love,

    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Mmmm, nice. Sort of "end of the worldy" as in judgement day, yet not necessarily.

    I like your serious side, Tiff, very well done.

    be happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Again, A few words that speak many volumes in the way it was written. As has been said, short, sweet and to the point. Another efective and good write from Tiffaroo.
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      Short but to the point. I have no idea what the @ symbol in brackets was about though. It confused me. Really good eupenisms here. Tears of broken glass is a bit used before, but the rest of the poem makes up for it. Good write!
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by thetwilight | [ Reply to This ]
      your poems alwaz say so much with so little words this is another smiling piece of poetry
    hope all is well with you to and thanx for all of your wonderful comments i have finally got the courage to put a book out it went for sale online last week called timeless you have read most of the stories wait for the next one ha ha
    wishing you and yors a merry christmas and all the best in 2006
    sandman
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked that. It had a very short sweet ot he point flow and I admire the way you wrote this out. I like the words you used and it gave me a certain sence of imagery.
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by sinister_always | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this poem.Short but sweet and to the point.I like this in poetry because for me it shows true talent to be able to speak such emotion in so little words and for me it takes alot of words.Truthfully a great right.

    ->Candace<-
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by ArtichokeMosher | [ Reply to This ]


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