[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav

  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav

    << | >>

    dots Submission Name: dream guydots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 755
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 611

       blah blah i hate my fuckin life.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsdream guydots

    we sat down
    upstairs in his room
    i begged him to write me a song
    he told me that he couldn't do me justice
    and then he played lithium
    i smiled
    asked him if i was his drug
    he laughed and said I wasn't that fun
    i punched him in the arm
    he played with my hair
    i fell in love
    he held me there
    we went upstairs
    and after a line of coke
    he played me the new song
    that he stayed up all night and wrote
    it was sweet
    it was about me
    what every girl wants
    to bad he was a dream

    Submitted on 2005-12-20 14:34:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      yah, i agree with the whole coke thing and i think that kills it, but yah...cute and its OK. we seem to have some kid of similarities in our dream guys.
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah...I don't like the coke reference either but this poem is sad. It's great until you say he's a dream. Is this what you truly desire? Is this the type of relationship you want? I wouldn't say it is bad. At least the guy's sweet and loves you. Does Cory not fit these qualifications?
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      I would like it a whole lot better without the coke reference. Coke is bad for you. Overall, it's pretty, and yeah, maybe a little morbid. And how did you go upstairs when you were already upstairs? Is this a metaphorical upstairs? Were the two of you "downstairs?" If you ask me what I mean, I'll probably shoot myself, cause I'm not really all that sure
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      ummmmmmmmmmmmmm coke yummy too bad i quit. any way it seems to me your dream guy is the same as mine

    k bye
    that girl
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]
      Morbid and sweet this poem is. Going upstairs to do a line of coke... hmm... not exactly what every girl wants. lol.

    Unique write!
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by thetwilight | [ Reply to This ]

    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?


    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    Your Lover written by Cordell
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    Formal Jen written by Daniel Barlow
    Silent Screams In Silent Dreams written by poetotoe
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    i've missed written by mysalvation
    Primitive Lapse written by Crestfallenman
    Shi written by ShyOne
    You read free written by poetotoe
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    Carry written by saartha
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Fasade written by jackz
    a safe place written by Daniel Barlow
    a mood to be free written by Daniel Barlow
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Cover written by saartha
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (5) written by endlessgame23
    I, Plutarch written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Etiquette written by saartha
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    no words for how graceful you are in this moment written by Daniel Barlow
    Love written by saartha
    Shut Up written by annie0888




    User Name:


    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]

    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]

    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]