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    dots Submission Name: dream guydots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       blah blah i hate my fuckin life.


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    dotsdream guydots
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    we sat down
    upstairs in his room
    i begged him to write me a song
    he told me that he couldn't do me justice
    and then he played lithium
    i smiled
    asked him if i was his drug
    he laughed and said I wasn't that fun
    i punched him in the arm
    he played with my hair
    i fell in love
    he held me there
    we went upstairs
    and after a line of coke
    he played me the new song
    that he stayed up all night and wrote
    it was sweet
    it was about me
    what every girl wants
    to bad he was a dream




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      yah, i agree with the whole coke thing and i think that kills it, but yah...cute and its OK. we seem to have some kid of similarities in our dream guys.
    | Posted on 2006-01-24 00:00:00 | by BleedingTears | [ Reply to This ]
      Yeah...I don't like the coke reference either but this poem is sad. It's great until you say he's a dream. Is this what you truly desire? Is this the type of relationship you want? I wouldn't say it is bad. At least the guy's sweet and loves you. Does Cory not fit these qualifications?
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by bleeding-soul | [ Reply to This ]
      I would like it a whole lot better without the coke reference. Coke is bad for you. Overall, it's pretty, and yeah, maybe a little morbid. And how did you go upstairs when you were already upstairs? Is this a metaphorical upstairs? Were the two of you "downstairs?" If you ask me what I mean, I'll probably shoot myself, cause I'm not really all that sure
    | Posted on 2006-01-20 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      ummmmmmmmmmmmmm coke yummy too bad i quit. any way it seems to me your dream guy is the same as mine

    k bye
    xoxo
    that girl
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by sweet sorenity | [ Reply to This ]
      Morbid and sweet this poem is. Going upstairs to do a line of coke... hmm... not exactly what every girl wants. lol.

    Unique write!
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by thetwilight | [ Reply to This ]


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