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Cannibal

Author:	cannibal
ASL Info:	18/f/MO usa
Elite Ratio:	3.88 - 47 /47 /15
Words:	80

Class/Type:	Poetry /Angry
Total Views:	875
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	529

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well this one is about 2 winters ago when our heat got turned off. The heat line to our trailer got cut so my parents had to live without heat while we lived at our grandfathers. I remember spending the night at the house and seeing how we had to sleep in one room together and how cold it was...yeah it pissed me off. this is about how our landlord wouldn't do anything about it. Tell me what you think.

Cannibal

You fester, diluted peace of flesh
meat to feed the fire with
let the slaves give the gold and you’ll live in your
well lit hell

lock the craver in its cell,
let him hunger ‘till death dwells
feed your slaves stale bread
waist your money on furnishings and “finer things”

feed that hunger
deep devour
‘till the kingdoms whole you’ve dug
for the gravestone will not give all you desire
your cannibalism will devour.

Submitted on 2005-12-20 15:31:17 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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wow. anger. i liked your word choice. but in the last stanza im not sure if you meant whole or hole. but maybe that was on purpose

| Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Itzmeemiflee | [ Reply to This ]

grrrrowllll! (that's really all i have to say.) haha.. yeah.. this was some intense anger... great descriptive words and.. just.. whoa.. you totalling set some vivid images in my mind... i want to go beat up this dumb landlord for being such a meanface... (yeah.. that's the best insult i got..) but yeah.. whoa.. very firey... i liked it.

Brooke

| Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]

This I liked
I men Really Really Liked
You spoke the truth
Where the heck was your landlord
Why couldnt he help
Even if it was to bring blankets or something as a way to help out your fellow man in a time of need
I swer to you
I only wish I knew why this world can be so selfish
God Bless
Your Friend
Ron

| Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]

This was pretty intense and raw! you did a good job of painting a picture of your feeling and this slumlord.

What a horrif time that must of been for your family.

A few typos I think you meant "waste" and I'm not sure if in the last stana you meant whole or hole.

Nice write!

Steve

| Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]

It sounds like your hard core pissed off right know. But I like it, it expresses your emotion really well. it flows nicely as well. i like the begining stanza as well. Keep up the good writes.
Gerorgina

| Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Raye | [ Reply to This ]

Yeah, I'd say you were pissed alright. this was very raw and feeled with disgust. Disgust for the miserly way the Landlord treated you. I'm so sorry to hear this happened to you and your family. The term you used to describe him sounds fitting, he was feeding off your family's rent money to live large. And it is sad he did not step up and fix your heating problem. This was really good.

Maggie

| Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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