Not Your Doll by RumnMoxie

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Submission Name: Not Your Doll dots

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Author:	RumnMoxie
ASL Info:	27/does it matter?/Maine
Elite Ratio:	4.07 - 97/87/37
Words:	176

Class/Type:	Poetry/Me
Total Views:	260
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	1137

Description:
This is something I thought of after looking back on some relationships and friendships. I can say after writing this I'm happy for how much I've grown in such a short time.

Not Your Doll dots

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I'm not Perfect
I don't carry a smile like a beauty queen
I don't walk with it plastered on my face like a cosmetic add
And I don't want to

I'm not the Social Superstar
I don't blend into a party to amaze people with my wit
I don't come quick to speak to new people
Because I'm not an Attention Diva

Instead I wonder inside my head
Constantly lost in thought
To others, it seems I look depressed or saddened
Is thinking honestly that rare of an art?

My head is a constant tinker-tape of ideas, thoughts and an endless spinning pool of curiosities
Yet, because I don't smile and play as something they want to see
I'm something completely different

I am Me
I am not a piece of clay needing to be molded
I am not someone who needs to be changed be the
Two dimentional doll you need me to be

I am
An Writer
A Thinker
An Artist
And I will never be
Someone's Build-a-Girl

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  Very defiant. As if someone is trying to force youto be...or appear to be someone you are not. I think we all go through this at one time or another in our lifes. The good news is that eventully we end up who we are, others ideas of us don't really matter any more and we settle in to the skin that works for us. If not it is like selling your soul...you will fight forever to get it back. Good work.

Greg
| Posted on 2006-05-02 00:00:00 | by Noah | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this poem. It speaks very frankly and honestly about you and gives the reader some good insight into your world and your mind. I like how in tune you are with yourself and it seems that you really like who you are just because you are who you are. You are not one of those phony type people who plaster on a fake smile and strive for nothing but attention. You respect yourself and like yourself for who you are and nothing more. That is great. Nobody should pretend to be something that they are not and yet so many people do. It takes a long time to really get to know someone because so many put on this fake representation and it leaves you trying to figure out if they are for real or if they are showing you only what they want you to see. I hate that. This poem is very refreshing and I am glad you are just you. Keep being you! There is nothing better than that. Take care.

Lorna
| Posted on 2006-04-24 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this! Comes across as total woman power. To be confident in one's self rocks. As far as the poem itself, I'd say tweak up the formating a bit since it interrupts flow here and there. Otherwise..great great. :)
| Posted on 2006-06-22 00:00:00 | by .:eVe:. | [ Reply to This ]
  Heh...it all makes sense. Just need to read into it a little less.

That's the end result, Stace. You're supposed to be content with who you are.

Although, a couple more things were supposed to happen before that, it just speaks volumes for what one can do with a little motivation.

Congratulations.
| Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by Orin | [ Reply to This ]
  It goes without saying your not my build-a-girl. I like you for who you are not what others want you to be.

As for your peice its an excilent read. It captures your mood and emotions excusitly.

How are things with you anyways. I haven't been on much because of school having me by the balls. One more final tomorrow and I'm done for three or four weeks before returning. Oh and I might get fired from work. More on that later if it happens...
| Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by Stinkywizlteats | [ Reply to This ]
  I liked this and a lot of it runs the same sentiments as what I think and feel about myself at times too. Being fake is over rated...thats why most people here arent in Hollywood, HA!
I kinda got confused by the last 2 words in the third line of the second to last stanza...kinda seems awkward, but maybe thats just ME, hee-hee! Definately a worthwhile read. Thanks for sharing!

| Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this. It is a good venting poem. it reaches me on som elevel far in the back of my mind...forgotten. i like this alot it was very good. Its a very"i dont have to be who and what you want me to be" thing. Umm i'd love for you to read some of my stuff and comment. thx a mil!
xoxoxo
Reeses
| Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by Numb | [ Reply to This ]
  Ah great. I love "I am me" poems... about individualism.. i wrote one a few years ago... poems like these are a reminder that there is so much more then just a person's exterior.. and that people are deeper then they appear. After reading this I have a sense about who you are.. and i think that's really cool... my favorite part is the last stanza.. because i relateso well to it... this is going in my favorites :)
Keep up the good work.
Brooke
| Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by melancholystar | [ Reply to This ]
  i liked the realism behind it, there is not enough of that these days, everyone tries to be who they are not, just because you are not the prom queen and you don't sit there and cut up in class and stuff like that then automatically you are different, depressed, suicidal, but yet you are jsut yourself, not very many people see that. i liked this one. be true to your self, not what others want.
| Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by in_a_trap | [ Reply to This ]
  You're right! you need to be true to your self. Those peole who chose to be close to you have to accept you as you are.

My fantasy was that you were talking to a boyfriend, who was constantly complaining; You don't smile enough you're no social enough etc.

Good write!

Steve
| Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by SHRINKSDR | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this
This is a very powerful write
You were not afraid to express the pride you have in yourself
This is so important in todays society
Evreyone tries to be better then there neighbor but you are saying it like it is without being egotistical
I loved this
God Bless
Ron

Please if you get a chance take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
Thank You
| Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  okay i really liked the muse behind this...it spoke volumes of how you are proud of what you are...the only thing i had a problem with as your reader was there was not enough orgininality in it...it seemed like they were just words thrown together...there wasn't any word formatting that just grabs your reader and fills them with emotion...

Tina
EGB
| Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Brownsdelight | [ Reply to This ]
  Wow I like this, It expresses what people atomatically think about a girl who's not what they want her to be. It has good rythum and it flows really good. I liked it keep it up.
Georgina
| Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Raye | [ Reply to This ]
  quite powerful. I could relate to this poem. I thought the way you compared yourself someone alive and bright, to what they wanted, a doll, something lifeless and is in the control of others, was brilliant. You had a steady flow and I liked how you showed how you are proud to be you and that you are comftable in your own skin. Great job.

Maggie
| Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Magnolia Steele | [ Reply to This ]

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