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    dots Submission Name: Never gonna stopdots
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    Author: Star
    ASL Info:    15 F WI
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 125/127/42
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
    Total Views: 1094
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 539



    Description:
       i dunno you tell me


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    dotsNever gonna stopdots
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    I feel the pain slowly crawling
    through my body
    covering me in a sweet numbness
    I watch as the blade stops
    as if taking a breath
    ready to plunge deeper into my skin,
    which craves the taste
    of the metal once again
    This hunger that can
    never quite be fulfilled
    only calmed for awhile
    The satin river that flows
    across my skin
    cascades onto the floor
    taking my pain with it
    I stop yet i know that
    this wont be the last time




    Submitted on 2005-12-20 19:37:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Was a bit hard to read, could really grasp your thoughts through each words lines 3 and 5 are really powerful.. still a bit hard to read
    Jessy rae
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by Artist4rent | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good write, in my opinion...
    I liked the way you expressed your self and described the tortur you were going through..
    Looking forward to reading more of your works,
    John
    | Posted on 2005-12-21 00:00:00 | by abuzzbuzz92 | [ Reply to This ]


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