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    dots Submission Name: Fix Medots

    Author: tinkerbellsas
    ASL Info:    22/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.33 - 67/66/32
    Words: 219
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsFix Medots

    The wounds I feel
    You can't seem to heal
    The rocky roads I've crossed
    All the dignity I've lost

    I hope the love you give
    Will again make my heart live
    But every night I fall asleep
    Deep inside my heart weeps

    You tell me to forget about the past
    But how can I forget all they trespassed
    The love and life they took from me
    They stole away with such cruelity

    I've tried to figure out how to let it all go
    And again let the real me show
    They've just caused so much damage
    And I carry around all the baggage

    Maybe if you keep on trying
    Inside I'll stop dying
    Just don't give up on us yet
    My flaws aren't such a threat

    The way my head gets so jealous
    Proving I'm not flawless
    I take all my pain out on you
    While you stand there without a clue what to do

    Just remember how much I love you
    And we'll surely make it through
    I know you are all I need
    And your heart has already agreed

    I want us to be together now
    And to you I make this solemn vow
    I'll try the hardest that I can
    To leave behind the hurt they began

    Submitted on 2005-12-20 19:49:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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