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    dots Submission Name: Rainbow of Paindots
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    Author: Deadly Sauce
    ASL Info:    18--lady--NY
    Elite Ratio:    2.69 - 59/77/31
    Words: 50
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 291
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    Description:
       Um, yeah...pain can be colorful...


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    dotsRainbow of Paindots
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    The mind shrieks louder than the body

    Screaming crimson
    Crusty scarlet relics
    Mummified emotion, flesh its tomb
    Soft blended shades of purple and blue
    Faded green and yellow
    Anger’s remains; a rainbow of mellowed pain

    Thoughts pour endlessly out of the eyes
    Words mangled in incoherent sobs




    Submitted on 2005-12-20 20:24:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I wish it was longer. I'll remember this poem for quite a long time. i like the title, rainbow of pain. You always see black, when you hear pain. I like that one line "crusty scarlet relics" makes me think of swirls.
    "have fun dying, since you might only do it once."
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by Red_reaper | [ Reply to This ]
      Very unique - That's my first thought. It could do better by going more onto the topic, and making it longer. Depressing, and this poem seems to welcome anything that contributes any sort of pain, which kinda saddens me. Otherwise its a nice read.

    Do take care of yourself.
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by RyukiTZR | [ Reply to This ]
      very creative.. a little depressing i guess but these days what isnt? i liked it style wise, and content wise...nothing wrong cept it was a little short and obviously with color there is rooms to expand. transparent tears and all of that.
    | Posted on 2005-12-20 00:00:00 | by EEKS | [ Reply to This ]



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